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Broken
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since 2000-03-12
Posts 271
The woods

0 posted 2000-08-01 07:44 PM



FAR UNDERTOW

Curiously I question the safety of darkness
Why am I here beneath dirt on my own again?
Hopelessly climbing a ladder without steps
And I never reach the top
Seems there never is an end

Rather I slide further below in fright
Fearing the depth underneath is fathomless
Hoping that someone above will here my pray
Though my faith is worn and thin
It's the only thing I got

Why am I asking more questions that come again?
'Cause maybe it was me who chose this loneliness
And so lonely it has been, that even God himself
Scarce seemed here to be

Afraid I am now to close my lids
Straining my eyes to keep them open
Postponing the dawning as far as possible
For Oh! How i hate the morning!

Deep down
Far undertow
I pine for my bride in the black wedding gown
And I know some day she'll arise from below



© Copyright 2000 Jay Hartson - All Rights Reserved
mustlove_mstleave
New Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 8

1 posted 2000-08-01 07:54 PM


Your poem floods me with many sensations....very depressing.....
very dark, I guess
The question in my mind: It is our choice to be lonely and for how far shall we creep down?
I love it Broken

Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
2 posted 2000-08-02 12:42 PM


Broken..Very dark stuff here.  Very appropriate for DP.  Lots of good questions asked.  Very good read.  Hardrock
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