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Ghostly Walls

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Christopher
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With mixed emotions rushing by
Preparing to depart.
To leave behind these ghostly walls.
To leave behind my heart.
The hallways drip with emptiness,
My footsteps echo loud
'Cross mem'ries of a simple life
Falls a somber shroud.
Another glance into the bedroom
Where we once acted love
Those walls saw so much happiness
Though now, nothing's left of
The laughter which once resounded
Twixt whispered forevers,
Gentle caresses in the night,
And promises to n'er
Let the other cross o'er the Earth
Alone, to face life's trials.
But promises made during times
O' joy, are just denial
Of the pain a broken heart brings
Preparing to depart
The empty halls of ghostly love
To face another start.
© Copyright 2000 C.G. Ward - All Rights Reserved
Deborah1
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1 posted 08-01-2000 06:07 PM       View Profile for Deborah1   Email Deborah1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Deborah1

Chris I really liked this, I would have voted this one! Loved the way you take the reader along, it gives a clear image as well. Excellent!!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar
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2 posted 08-01-2000 08:28 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Loved this Christopher as I do all your stuff, the reader journeys with you through your pain.. Great stuff as always  

I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn.....
~Isis~
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Very nice Christopher, "the empty halls of ghostly love". Awesome.
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4 posted 08-01-2000 10:05 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~Christopher,...I was a fly. On the wall. Of your thoughts. Felt this one. Ghostly walls and emptiness dripping. Ooh. Yep! Got me. Be well Sir C. *Peace.
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5 posted 08-04-2000 11:35 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Well, I think this is very well done. The images work nicely with the whole theme. But, I still think you should be banned for posting this in the wrong forum (just kidding!).

Elizabeth


Why ME???
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6 posted 08-04-2000 11:40 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Thank you everyone!

(cept' Liz, cause you're a meanie!)  
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7 posted 08-04-2000 11:52 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

and I'll watch Elizabeth's back on this one, Chris, I'm still mad at you for having it moved from Voices!!!  :P
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and I'll watch Elizabeth's back on this one, Chris, I'm still mad at you for having it moved from Voices!!!  :P  and see there!  I'm so mad, I'm stuttering!!!

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10 posted 08-04-2000 12:08 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Whaddaya mean, I'm a meanie? I was nice and said this piece was good! And guess what? I even printed it, so there!

Elizabeth


Why ME???
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11 posted 08-04-2000 12:47 PM       View Profile for Beth   Email Beth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beth

~Christopher,
I really enjoyed this.
Looks like Im going to be searching
for all your work. I love all that I
have read so far~
Beth
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12 posted 08-04-2000 12:54 PM       View Profile for poutprincess   Email poutprincess   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poutprincess

this was touching..full of heart and sorrow...much enjoyed!
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OKOKOK!

Then it's my turn to ask your forgiveness Liz!  

Poutprincess, thank you.

Beth - Please do! But you'll have to look a ways back for most of it! I haven't been posting too much in the past couple of months!  
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14 posted 11-03-2000 03:57 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Don't know why I'm doing this, but I like this poem so I'm bringing it back up.

Elizabeth


You cling to your ways and leave mine to me.
Suum cuique.
~Elizabeth


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15 posted 11-03-2000 05:22 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

*bump* (just watchin' her back, Chris!)
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I agree with Isis.. beautiful, as always..but, as I read it..I can't help but feel the walls are not only physical structures, but visceral ones as well. Empty, but resounding memories of love shared there.

Sheila

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17 posted 11-03-2000 08:39 PM       View Profile for Lady Lost   Email Lady Lost   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lady Lost

the irony that this was brought back up is killing me.  what can I say...

I know how you felt.  

p.s.  where r u???
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does that mean you've forgiven me Elizabeth?  

S'en - traitor!!!

Sheila - walls can be both physical and metaphorical - in this case, both. You saw it the way it is.  

Beth - Yeah - sad to say, many understand this feeling - probably why new walls are such a good thing.

Thanks all for the ressurection!  

Chris
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I think this poem is great. I like the ryhme scheme and the way it flows. I hope to reach this level soon.......like.....like right NOW!



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!
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Oh, excuse me while I grab a tissue...

Plhhhhhuuueeee

I feel better now.  

Actually, Chris, I liked this poem alot but Geeze, I guess living with Linda is starting to rub off on me a bit.  While raw with emotion, I feel the flow could be tweaked to run a little smoother in just a couple of spots.  Great title, btw, sets the perfect tone for the piece.


Michael
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21 posted 11-04-2000 09:25 AM       View Profile for Suzanne Arlene   Email Suzanne Arlene   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Suzanne Arlene

great poem but should we build walls to hide old rooms? Just a thought. Made me think and first thing on a Saturday morning too  
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Wheeeew... this is awesome! I just loved it:
"The hallways drip with emptiness,
My footsteps echo loud
'Cross mem'ries of a simple life
Falls a somber shroud."

You're good, man...  
Take Care!

"Most girls want a man with the mean green
Don't wanna dance if he can't be
Everything that I dream up
A man that understands real love"

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Ilike the walk you take us on room by room through a house of sadness. Just open the doorway to pain, come on in. Great write. Ron

Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox

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24 posted 11-04-2000 12:06 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Thank you all for replying - this is in fact much older than even the date above indicates - it was written in response when a good friend wrote a poem for me about leaving my old house, one with many memories in the corners, and ghostly walls. In this case, the walls are again, both metaphorical and real ones. Metaphorical of course in the manner of walls around the heart - sometimes they're necessary for a person's continuing health - it's too dangerous to brood constantly over the pain - the erection of those walls can help block the pain until it's faded enough to e manageable. The walls of the home itself simply needed to be left behind. There was too much pain in every glance I took at a wall that once held pictures of a life that no longer existed.

Once again, thank you all, it's been a treat to see again the difference between where I was "then" and where I am "now."

Chris
 
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