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Rusted Knight

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catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone


0 posted 07-31-2000 05:28 PM       View Profile for catalinamoon   Email catalinamoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit catalinamoon's Home Page   View IP for catalinamoon

Oh knight in tarnished armor,
how will this come to pass?
Your princess long awaits you,
her love will always last.

You could slay her dragons
if you'd just unsheath your sword.
She calls to you so desperately.
How dare you act so bored?

She worships you, as much as if
you never let her down.
Take off your helmet for a day.
Your true love may be found.

She right there waiting on the side
until you're done your fight.
Hurry now, you still have time
to shield her through this night.

Don't gaze afar too often,
your princess has a heart.
It's tender and it's breaking,
Don't you see her fall apart?

Are you a knight as you profess,
or just another knave?
Do you ride off without a care
when only you can save?

She gives you one last chance,
though you don't deserve her love.
Sir Knight, you'd better take it,
lest she fly far as your dove.


[This message has been edited by catalinamoon (edited 07-31-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Sandra - All Rights Reserved
Deborah1
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1 posted 07-31-2000 08:09 PM       View Profile for Deborah1   Email Deborah1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Deborah1

This was a new and creative way to express a love awaiting for someone..and I really enjoyed the "tale" and how you created this!! Really good Cat!!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar
Nikolette Sadness
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2 posted 07-31-2000 09:36 PM       View Profile for Nikolette Sadness   Email Nikolette Sadness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nikolette Sadness

my knight is as yours...he doesn't deserve my love...but i do wiat for him...for i am no dove....


sorry its kinda poemish...it just came out

Nik

i was once in love and happy...but you can call me Sadness.
MMoonchild
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3 posted 08-01-2000 12:49 AM       View Profile for MMoonchild   Email MMoonchild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit MMoonchild's Home Page   View IP for MMoonchild

She worships you, as much as if
you never let her down.
Take off your helmet for a day.
Your true love may be found.


enjoyed...
very different for you  catalina
~~soft smiles
M
SpitFire
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4 posted 08-01-2000 12:03 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~Cat,...you tell 'em. This is so creatively written. I loved it's story like theme. So many of these paragraphs just make me go *ouch*. *sigh*. You deserve only the best. Sending sunshine your way. Take care S. *Peace.
Deborah1
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5 posted 08-02-2000 09:56 AM       View Profile for Deborah1   Email Deborah1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Deborah1

Cat, go back to where I can vote for this one...MY little P.S as I forgot to tell you that oops, thanks Deb

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar
Lynne Dale
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6 posted 08-02-2000 10:04 AM       View Profile for Lynne Dale   Email Lynne Dale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lynne Dale

Cat this is different for you, but I really like it.
Be well

Kethry.
When dark of night steals your soul. Think of me and be made whole.

demoninlove
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7 posted 08-02-2000 10:31 AM       View Profile for demoninlove   Email demoninlove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for demoninlove

Now this was very very well written! And the piquant longing for the blind and stupid lover who does not see the beauty before his eyes presented very well.An eminently readable poem - with a steady effortless flow
Good Show
Deepak

L Tiuch
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8 posted 08-02-2000 10:57 AM       View Profile for L Tiuch   Email L Tiuch   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for L Tiuch

Well done, Cat.  How many times love goes unrequited.  Sadly written, and oh so true.  Linda
Hardrock
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9 posted 08-03-2000 08:23 AM       View Profile for Hardrock   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Hardrock

Cat, I agree, this is a departure from your usual style...but it is uniquely beautiful.  I, too, loved the story-book theme.  Do some more for us.  Hardrock
EWDrake
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10 posted 08-03-2000 09:01 AM       View Profile for EWDrake   Email EWDrake   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit EWDrake's Home Page   View IP for EWDrake

Wow, loved this...made me ponder my own journies along midievel paths....May I?

Wrapped in Heraldic Argent

Grace walketh in the forest
her tall lithe form
with a silver halo
and gentle aura
draped in sheer silver silk.
             ~Silver Angel~

Our wandering knight doth mark
progress along her graceful way
by blushing silvered roses blooming
in filigreed ivory amorettes
from thorns which in her path
would'st his armour hath pricked
prior to thine's passing.

This knight would'st thee approach
with courtesy in all manner
of chivalric virtue,
ne’er thine name to disparage.

To be worthy thine accolades
this knave doth so aspireth
as thine chain of fealty
doth this gallant knight errant
be so lurethed by,
link by silvered link,
to thine chalice which doth
with kindred kindness overflow.

Wouldest but that body
be more noble than soul,
thine indulgence he doth request
and in humbled homage pay thee
with this rusty relic
of life's worn sentient
tucked along soul's allurement
nestled indepthly within
his mind's castle keep.

Draped in silvered lunar glow
She walks as Grace,
her carriage of noble virtue
born of an ancient silvered soul
with haloed head held high.

EWDrake 5/2K


With a long held breath given dark freedom, the single flame in sorrow's window flickers out.
~EWD~
catalinamoon
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Gosh Evan, your knight far outshines mine. I wish I knew where to find him.. Beautiful poem, and such authentic feel.
Cat....
Sudhir Iyer
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12 posted 08-03-2000 02:19 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Excellent work, CatalinaMoon...

liked it a lot!

regards,
sudhir
JamesMichael
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13 posted 08-03-2000 02:58 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

I enjoyed reading these thoughts....This knight seems to lack appreciation...perhaps he is undeserving of yours...James
EWDrake
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14 posted 08-04-2000 12:34 PM       View Profile for EWDrake   Email EWDrake   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit EWDrake's Home Page   View IP for EWDrake

No, Cat, mine is merely different in style. Rusted Knight is lovely and sincere. You have a way of making one feel as you intend. I greatly enjoy reading you. More...
Thank you m'lady...
Evan

With a long held breath given dark freedom, the single flame in sorrow's window flickers out.
~EWD~

Beth
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15 posted 08-04-2000 12:40 PM       View Profile for Beth   Email Beth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beth

~A superb poem indeed~
Deranger
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16 posted 08-04-2000 12:43 PM       View Profile for Deranger   Email Deranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Deranger

Not all who wander are lost.  J.R.R Token said that, and I use it in a similar context.  Some people are cursed to wander endlessly and keep both sword and shield firmly in place.  
Oh crap, my replies are getting pointless again…must be waking up….



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J. K. Mitchell
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17 posted 06-26-2002 02:26 PM       View Profile for J. K. Mitchell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for J. K. Mitchell

This is very good.  It has this longing in it that I can't help but relate to.  Good write!
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