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DJLI
Member

since 2000-06-21

Posts 237
TN, USA

0 posted 2000-07-31 03:17 AM

You're swept up in your own pity,
no thoughts of any one else.
You say you've been slapped around all your life,
with no one for you to call for help.
Look at who you've become.

You went to therapy twice a week,
you say it did no good.
You always seem happy,
until someone comes along to share your joy.
Look at who you've become.

You say your youth was a waste,
that you hate your life and want it to end.
I see you laughing, and talking the talk,
but then you start to cry, cause you can't walk the walk.
Look at who you've become.

When will you get a clue as to how life should be?
Will you ever stop trying to gain friends through pity?
You're a fake.
How could I not have seen it before?
Look at who you've become.

When will you ever grow up and learn?
When will I ever stop giving into you cries of pain?
Look at us now.
Each as pathetic as the other.
Look at who we've both become.

EVEN ANGELS FALL.

taramw
Senior Member

since 2000-06-08

Posts 738

1 posted 2000-07-31 06:38 AM

Wow! Very moving indeed... Ended very well!

Deborah1
Senior Member

since 2000-06-22

Posts 653
New Hampshire

2 posted 2000-07-31 08:01 AM

Sometimes taking a "look" can help you make some changes. I liked this very much!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

SpitFire
Member Elite

since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

3 posted 2000-07-31 11:24 AM

~Powerful piece. Full of tension. I have to admit that I got caught up in this one. Nice work. Be well D. *Peace.

MMoonchild
Senior Member

since 2000-07-13

Posts 1715
PA

4 posted 2000-08-01 04:20 PM

This was definitely filled with emotion,DJLI
nice work.

~~soft smile
Maureen

kynder
Senior Member

since 2000-04-11

Posts 537
Tallahassee, Florida

5 posted 2000-08-01 04:23 PM

i can only echo the thoughts of everyone above. this is quite a piece of work here!! i love how you show both sides, yet the pros and cons of them both. very very good!!

kynder

Sunshine can not bleach
The snow,
Nor time unmake what
Poets know.

Ralph Waldo Emerson

Hardrock
Senior Member

since 2000-02-14

Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA

6 posted 2000-08-01 06:14 PM

LiLi...Excellent!! I agree, this was tension-filled. It has a strong message too. Sometimes we all need a dose of "wake-up". Hardrock

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