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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

0 posted 2000-07-30 04:47 AM



Dying Rose



Like the silken petals,
     of a dying rose,
        tears
stream

       d
        o
         w
          n a reddened face.

  Smears of the masque
which once served
   -as a shield-
trace
   along the contours
    of swollen cheeks.

Convulsive spasms
    of heartbroken sobs
      clench and un-clench.

It's a rapid motion;
    not unlike a-
soul-shaking seizure.

   Gripped
by this harsh reality
in an uncaring,
  spiteful world-
madness seems to beckon...
...as does death.


Yet...
   oblivion is much crueler-
       a more terrible realism
    than the agony
       of aching thoughts.

   Life,
however unprecious,  
however ungiving,
   is still life.

It offers little.
Is as selfish
     as a newborn babe.

  What is gained
from the time given-
is gained only by taking;
  seizing the warmth-
  of a summer breeze-
  -or embracing the love,
        which once was there.


© Copyright 2000 C.G. Ward - All Rights Reserved
lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
1 posted 2000-07-30 04:55 AM


This is really really wonderful. I especially like the beginning!

Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo



brian madden
Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
2 posted 2000-07-30 08:12 AM


WOw Chris, a beautiful piece, really enjoyed it.

"A frog, it cannot comprehend the sea Nor me happiness" Paul Draper-Mansun

Lynne Dale
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since 2000-07-18
Posts 114
Melbourne Victoria
3 posted 2000-07-30 09:05 AM


I loved this. It speaks strongly to me. Thanks.
Kethry

Kethry.
When dark of night steals your soul. Think of me and be made whole.


catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
4 posted 2000-07-30 09:30 AM


Christopher, very nice poem. Very good advice. Loved it.
Catalinamoon

Practice can make anything perfect...even grief can become an art.
Merrit Malloy

Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley
5 posted 2000-07-30 10:39 AM


I like it just as much as the unreworked version!  
Deborah1
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since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
6 posted 2000-07-30 10:51 AM


As selfish as a newborn babe...how true!! Loved the whole thing, excellent job here Chris!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

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