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Lynne Dale
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since 2000-07-18
Posts 114
Melbourne Victoria

0 posted 2000-07-30 04:10 AM


You kiss me in the morning, it feels like goodbye,
I don't know the when and wonder 'bout the why;
our love at first encompassed the earth, the stars, the sky
now you kiss me in the morning and it feels like goodbye.

You hold my hand at noon-time, now I know it is farewell
and I am suspended between heaven and pure hell
a broken empty vessel, just a hollow shell
for you held my hand at noon-time and I knew it was farewell

You brushed my cheek this evening and said, "hey kid so-long
It really has been great, but now I have to move along"
The words within me withered as I wondered what went wrong
that you brushed my cheek, shut the door and were completely gone



Kethry.
When dark of night steals your soul. Think of me and be made whole.


© Copyright 2000 Lynne Dale - All Rights Reserved
Nikolette Sadness
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port richey fl.
1 posted 2000-07-30 04:26 AM


that just brought me memories i had long forgotten...you can have this tear.
Nikolette Sadness


i was once in love and happy...but you can call me Sadness.

Lynne Dale
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since 2000-07-18
Posts 114
Melbourne Victoria
2 posted 2000-07-30 08:52 AM


Thank you Nikolette for the sympathetic response. I appreciate it.

Kethry.
When dark of night steals your soul. Think of me and be made whole.


Deborah1
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since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
3 posted 2000-07-30 11:27 AM


Oh how sad Lynne...But I truly loved the poem!!!!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

Eloise
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since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096
Wyoming
4 posted 2000-07-30 12:49 PM


I liked the flow of this Lynne.  Those good-bye feelings are always hard.  Very well written.  
SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

5 posted 2000-07-30 12:55 PM


~This read so well. Has a sound to it that just fits so well with the contents of the poem. Those little touches that you know are final in their doing make a heart ache. Wonderful poem. Be well LD. *Peace.
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