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Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S

0 posted 2000-07-29 04:21 PM


The roses are dead now
All thanks to me it
Wasen't you.

Once bright red roses
Now their black as all
The depths of hell

I tried to give you a
Better life but, i triped
And and all the roses fell

They never made it to your
Home, to the water they needed
So their surviving strength depleeded

And now your red
Roses turn black
As i die


these are just a few new one's from me. to keep your mines busy well i'm moving from Fl to SC starting tomorrow so i'll see you all soon once i get set up there.


I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


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AVANTI
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE
1 posted 2000-07-29 04:39 PM


well written poem...
and lovely signature...


If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao


catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
2 posted 2000-07-29 08:52 PM


Beautiful Jeremiah. Good luck with your move.
Sandra

Deborah1
Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
3 posted 2000-07-29 10:29 PM


Nicely written!! and I wish you best luck on your move too!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

DJLI
Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 237
TN, USA
4 posted 2000-07-30 12:25 PM


i agree...well written...hope the move goes easily, its something i hate to do myself.

EVEN ANGELS FALL.

lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
5 posted 2000-07-30 02:02 AM


This is a long one for you, Jeremiah!
Very sad, but good as always.
Have fun moving!


Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo



Xeonox
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since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764
CA, USA
6 posted 2000-07-30 02:57 AM


You fill my mind with the food that you give. This was awesome man. You have to show me your tricks. LOL

Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

Nikolette Sadness
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Member
since 2000-07-29
Posts 337
port richey fl.
7 posted 2000-07-30 03:00 AM


i would only like to know the age of this amazing writer so someday i can marry his talent and be his penmen...
         Nikolette Sadness

i was once in love and happy...but you can call me Sadness.

Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
8 posted 2000-07-30 02:35 PM


thank you all for your replies and saddness please check your email. i enjoy all of your works very much and will be reading as much as i can.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


kitkat
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since 2000-01-11
Posts 878
Nova Scotia
9 posted 2000-07-30 03:22 PM


I liked this. Very nicely written and expressed.
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