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SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
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0 posted 2000-07-29 11:27 AM


Dance With Me In Fields Of Rain

Dance
with me
in fields
of rain,where
sun is shy, and
flowers die, and
grayness overcomes,
where smiles hide,and
laughter goes, where no one
knows,and tickles slip away,
where puddles form of sadness,
and anger swells,and gloom surr-
ounds the days,so dance with me
in fields of rain,where tears
erase the years,and shouting
reaches sky, where pain is
free to roam, and all
that's there are
blackened tears
and angry
people
cry.



© Copyright 2000 SpitFire - All Rights Reserved
a-alibaster
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 392

1 posted 2000-07-29 12:11 PM


I am astounded!!! The form, the words, the beauty....absolutally wonderful to read and feel!!

"There is an alter ego which
dwells in every soul..."
a-alibaster

"I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less,
I am tears of pain, tears of Death.

lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
2 posted 2000-07-29 12:17 PM


Yes, fire, this is wonderful. I love the raindrop shape of the poem. I am wading through fields, forests and days of rain!

Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo



SpitFire
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Posts 2396

3 posted 2000-07-29 12:24 PM


~Thank you both kindly,...I feel bad that I posted and am running, but I've got to go out. I'll be back later to read, read, read, all that I have missed,...been a bit busy lately. Be well. *Peace.
Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
4 posted 2000-07-29 12:32 PM


SpitFire...I'm so envious of you...your talent for writing, your knowledge of html to allow you to shape your words...your ingenuity.  The poem is superb, YOU are even better.  Hardrock
jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
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Spring, Texas
5 posted 2000-07-29 12:40 PM


Another "best" from you Spitfire! Beautifully done!
catalinamoon
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6 posted 2000-07-29 12:56 PM


Superb, awesome, love it.  You are so cool...
brian madden
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ireland
7 posted 2000-07-29 02:59 PM


a wonderful piece, really enjoyed this.  
peace

"A frog, it cannot comprehend the sea Nor me happiness" Paul Draper-Mansun

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
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Lansing, MI USA
8 posted 2000-07-29 10:32 PM


SF,

Great formatting my friend!!  You are writing so well these days.  A pleasure to read!!  You know I am always right there beside you in the rain!!  Wonderful writing.  Take care you.

LW


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

DJLI
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since 2000-06-21
Posts 237
TN, USA
9 posted 2000-07-30 12:22 PM


wonderful formatt...dancing in the rain is a personal favorite pasttime...great job!

EVEN ANGELS FALL.

Xeonox
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10 posted 2000-07-30 03:07 AM


Why do you write such an awesome poetry in such few words? Hot!!!

Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

Lynne Dale
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since 2000-07-18
Posts 114
Melbourne Victoria
11 posted 2000-07-30 09:51 AM


Awesome poem. You should think about submitting it for the book.
Kethry.

Kethry.
When dark of night steals your soul. Think of me and be made whole.


Eloise
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since 1999-11-27
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Wyoming
12 posted 2000-07-30 12:53 PM


Wow, SpitFire, this is so well written.  I thoroughly enjoyed this one.  
Ginners
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since 2000-07-22
Posts 339
Mullica Hill, New Jersey
13 posted 2000-07-30 01:23 PM


Not only was this a very well written poem, but it was also formated nicely, i agree you should submitt it for the book
MMoonchild
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since 2000-07-13
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PA
14 posted 2000-07-30 04:21 PM


loved it...we should have a challenge on pattern poetry
~~softly
Maureen

serenity blaze
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15 posted 2000-07-30 05:05 PM


"and angry people cry..."  perfect ending that...and I love your title...You rock!
Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
16 posted 2000-07-31 12:33 PM


Wonderful work and formatting here hon, so glad I didn't miss this one....  Again you are accomplishing big time now hon  

I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn.....
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



Martie
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17 posted 2000-07-31 12:37 PM


Wonderful to read and look at!
Marge Tindal
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18 posted 2000-07-31 01:19 AM


SpitFireGirl~
You're talking my stuff !
I LOVE the format.

Pop up to Open #8 and check out
my 'Feather Me' .... are we on
the same wavelength or what ?

So good to see the growth in your writing.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com


sash
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since 2000-06-22
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19 posted 2000-07-31 01:28 AM


Beautiful to read...Beautiful to see...Awesome job!!

        ~Sash~


taramw
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20 posted 2000-07-31 06:50 AM


SpitFire... oh such a tremendous poem!!!      Loved it!  
Wren
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since 2000-07-05
Posts 312

21 posted 2000-07-31 11:31 AM


Great job! I enjoyed the feel and the mood of this poem. The shape of the poem was also very pleasing to the eye.
-Wren

The thread of destiny
Unknown by anyone
Unseen by anyone
Winds around your heart
Moist with tears
-Vampire Princess Miyu Theme

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
22 posted 2000-07-31 11:38 AM


Wonderful work indeed!!!

SpitFire ,
My regards,
sudhir

Verve
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since 1999-06-23
Posts 348
Singapore
23 posted 2000-07-31 01:28 PM



WOW!!!!!!!!
need i say more???

~verve

Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
24 posted 2000-08-01 12:19 PM


this, this is a great wonderful poem i enjoyed and still enjoy reading it the way you shaped your words and such. i do hope to see more from you real soon.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


Dedreia
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since 2000-07-10
Posts 172
Kokomo, Indiana, United States
25 posted 2000-08-01 01:18 PM


Absolutely Awesome...enough said.  Dee


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