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DJLI
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since 2000-06-21
Posts 237
TN, USA

0 posted 2000-07-29 01:31 AM


I used to think I loved you,
I convinced myself it was real,
I used to think you cared for me,
and felt the same as I used to feel.

I know now I was mistaken,
and that I never really mattered to you,
At first my world was crushed,
and I just didn't know what to do.

But now I understand my problem,
that it was never really me,
It turns out your just an idiot,
the biggest there could ever be.

Now my life is going good,
and I hope your is, too,
you taught me a wonderful lesson,
but now, I'm so over you.


EVEN ANGELS FALL.

© Copyright 2000 Lisa Marie - All Rights Reserved
MiseryDivine
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since 2000-06-13
Posts 114
Chicago! en america...oh lala! i wish i lived in England.....(sigh)
1 posted 2000-07-29 01:38 AM


ooooo....i really liked this...i've just got over feeling the same way...so ive been there...i think you portrayed it perfectly...good work!
taramw
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

2 posted 2000-07-29 04:43 AM


Excellent!   Portrayed very well indeed!  
Deborah1
Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
3 posted 2000-07-29 08:59 AM


Sometimes the loss of love is a blessing in disguise as they say. Glad your feeling happy, this was really good!1

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

Hardrock
Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
4 posted 2000-07-29 12:46 PM


Li..It does my heart good to know that you finally found yourself and the words to tell him to kiss off.  Nicely put.  Hardrock
jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
5 posted 2000-07-29 12:52 PM


Agree with all the comments...nicely written..."your" in next to last stanza,  should be "you're"...

jwesley

catalinamoon
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since 2000-06-03
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The Shores of Alone
6 posted 2000-07-29 01:05 PM


Yes, I know that feeling. Stated well, glad you are over him. It's a good feeling when you can really say "I'm DONE". Nicely written, too.
Catalinamoon

Dark_kisses_Within
Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas
7 posted 2000-07-29 01:15 PM


Alrighty then !!!!!!!  GREAT poem here.  You did an excellent job! I really loved it.  And I am also glad you turned life around and made a BETTER one for yourself.  

Peace
DkW


Once there was a darkness
Deep and endless night
You gave me everything you had
Ahhhhhh you gave me light


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