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The Break-Up

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Deborah1
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0 posted 07-27-2000 01:56 PM       View Profile for Deborah1   Email Deborah1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Deborah1



Written for a time not so long ago during a break-up. Things today are much better.

On scorched days
I could still feel..
A chill in the air

Why we chose each other
Became..
A worn and frazzled list
That littered the yard

Immersed in turbulence
We had abandoned all hope
A languid flight
No comfort zone

Attention riveted on
The last sounding word
Which echoed..
A grudging goodbye

To find my way..
Took iron persistence
I gathered courage
Pushing onward..

Now immersed in hope
Wth mended wings
The heart once silenced
Echoes..
A new beginning


The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar
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SpitFire
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since 04-19-2000
Posts 2428


1 posted 07-27-2000 08:34 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~Deborah,..."Immersed in turbulence",...how creative of you. The last part makes me smile,..to atleast know that you have the hope. Wonderful work. Be well D. *Peace.
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The Shores of Alone


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Oh Deb, this is awesome. "A worn and frazzled list that littered the yard". Been there?? Oh yeah. I love this, go back in and put it up for book submission.  
Hardrock
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since 02-14-2000
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3 posted 07-28-2000 10:52 AM       View Profile for Hardrock   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Hardrock

Deb...I agree with SF and Cat...such beautiful imagery here amongst the yard litter.  How well I know, too, that last grudging goodbye.  Excellent.  Hardrock
Lynne Dale
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since 07-18-2000
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Melbourne Victoria


4 posted 07-29-2000 07:49 AM       View Profile for Lynne Dale   Email Lynne Dale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lynne Dale

I loved the imagery and juxtaposition in this.
I especially loved
A worn and frassled list. You image what I aspire to be.
Kethry

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lotharingia
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since 06-04-2000
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saarbruecken, Germany


5 posted 07-29-2000 12:09 PM       View Profile for lotharingia   Email lotharingia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit lotharingia's Home Page   View IP for lotharingia

This is very good!
I could *feel* the friction!


Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo


Hopefloats
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Posts 26
NH


6 posted 02-28-2002 04:15 PM       View Profile for Hopefloats   Email Hopefloats   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Hopefloats

Im back....and I am here with my new "name".  How true this verse became once again in my life...ahhh but now I have found "true" love....How blessed am I!!!!!!
 
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