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Birth of an Immortal

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Poet deVine
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0 posted 07-26-2000 08:07 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Poet deVine

*This is the first of my Immortal Series poems...hope you like it:


Celestial spirit of the night
Gliding into her loverís embrace
A moment stolen, a sweet touch
Then gone without a trace

Sweet smile of love she offers him
Her visage too beautiful to bear
But he cannot deny her
He longs to have her there

Tender words disarm him
As he smiles at her in delight
This ethereal lover seeking
Fulfillment from the night

She amazes him with her vigor
Her lust has no earthly restraint
She saps his very mortality
Until he realizes itís too late

The last night she seeks him out
She tells him of her wicked plan
She needed to produce a child
From the seed of an earthly man

Immortal was the name she used
Woman doomed to forever lust
Bound by a curse from ancient witch
Never to die and join the dust

She let him touch the belly
That held his unborn child
In a moment he saw her
Half human, an Immortal wild

In his mindís eye, she appeared;
So breathlessly magnificent
Dark green eyes, flaming hair
Her form meant for manís bedevilment

His woman child would live on
Forever, it has been decreed
And he a lowly mortal
Had provided the fertile seed

His lover turned to leave him
A smile of cunning in her eyes
He knew his death was required
For this mating compromise

The child, a girl, was born anon
As beautiful as had been foretold
And from the time of her birth
She upheld the Immortal code

© Copyright 2000 Poet deVine - All Rights Reserved
catalinamoon
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1 posted 07-26-2000 08:32 PM       View Profile for catalinamoon   Email catalinamoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit catalinamoon's Home Page   View IP for catalinamoon

And this poem shall be immortal as well.
Incredible..
LarBear
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2 posted 07-26-2000 08:57 PM       View Profile for LarBear   Email LarBear   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LarBear

Wow... Great poem...

I look forward to the next one..

LarBear
SpitFire
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3 posted 07-27-2000 10:19 AM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~PDV,...definately looking forward to the others in tow of this! Very creatively written...extremely mentally entertaining!  Be well P. *Peace.
Jester59701
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4 posted 07-27-2000 12:42 PM       View Profile for Jester59701   Email Jester59701   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jester59701

Awesome Sharon!
Very interesting concept! Those immortals sound hot! To die for! Keep them coming!
                         Jester  ':~)
Deborah1
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PDV..I so love this!! and do look forward for the others to come!!! Thanks for a wonderful read!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar
Poet deVine
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6 posted 07-28-2000 11:41 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Thank you all for you kind comments. These 'immortal' poems seem to write themselves. I am think I should send one to Boris Vallejo and ask if he wants to collaborate!  
demoninlove
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Divine De Vine!
Deepak

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8 posted 07-28-2000 05:39 PM       View Profile for Hardrock   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Hardrock

PdV..I love the entire Immortal series.  I'm hooked.  Hardrock
Martie
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Wonderful work here, PdV!
Lynne Dale
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Incredible. I love this series. Keep writing.
Kethry


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as soon as you feel too old to do a thing. Do it!
Portia
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11 posted 07-29-2000 07:23 AM       View Profile for Portia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Portia

This concept is so similar to some prose work I have going. I love the style here. Your language is timeless.

"And one day...the whole stinking world would be theirs..."
-- Velvet Goldmine (Todd Haynes, Oscar Wilde and, unofficially, David Bowie)
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12 posted 05-23-2002 02:18 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

*sigh* Elegant, eloquent, powerful, beautiful. Like an Immortal herself, ah suppose.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

 
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