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JohnDLeclare
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0 posted 2000-07-26 07:52 PM


Long Walk

Perhaps
Today,
I’ll walk
The gray wood

Boots,
Thick socks,
Coat,
And hood.

Pants that blend
With dirty snow
Heavy shirt
Will I go?

Gloves?
I may,
But pockets work.
I’ll not care.

Into gray
Clouds, tree trunks,
Sunless sky,
Branches bare.

Slowly walking.
Towards? away?
Till fading light
End of day.

Spring may come,
For someone else.
I could stop
Feel the cold.

My woods,
They’re dark.
Frozen, still.
Quiet, old.


Perhaps,
Tonight,
I’ll walk on.
Past twilight.

John D LeClare


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Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
1 posted 2000-07-26 08:08 PM


This is so inviting! It would be great to take a long, slow walk in the woods and though the mood here is somber, it somehow fits my mood today. I liked this!  
MMoonchild
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2 posted 2000-07-26 08:17 PM


Perhaps,
Tonight,
I’ll walk on.
Past twilight.

this says it all for me..
~~soft thanks
Maureen

SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

3 posted 2000-07-27 10:03 AM


~Oh wow,...I really like this style of your writing. Enjoyable. Such a somber tale though,...such a well written one too. Left me feeling sort of quiet and low. Be well JDL. *Peace.

*Welcome here!!!

Deborah1
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since 2000-06-22
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4 posted 2000-07-27 03:03 PM


Hmmm, I must say, something about this I liked very much, would have voted for this one!! Vivid images for me, Great Job!!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

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5 posted 2000-07-28 12:06 PM


You got it going on. Just awesome usuage of such simple words which sends shivers down my spine yet a warm touch of glow I feel.

Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
6 posted 2000-07-28 12:37 PM


Very nice,John. I love the way you used such small groups of words, that express the image perfectly.
Catalinamoon

Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
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7 posted 2000-07-28 05:31 PM


John...Brevity is not only the soul of wit, it is the soul of this beautiful poem.  Hardrock
Eloise
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8 posted 2000-07-28 06:30 PM


I liked this style of writing.  Great poem.
Chere
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9 posted 2000-07-28 09:04 PM


This poem is simply wonderful.  And what I felt the third time through was that your thoughts merge the two . . .darkness & light that is*

Chere*

JohnDLeclare
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10 posted 2000-07-31 05:14 AM


Thanks for all the great comments. Is it just my ISP or is it very hard to get to this site ? I have been unable to log in all week end  

John D

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