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ChibiDeathscythe
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since 2000-06-09
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0 posted 2000-07-26 02:09 PM



Those girls scare me
you know the ones
who try to see
what they've become
they want to be
as good as gold
they are really goddesses
(or so they're told)
they live in the city
their bodies are sold
their lives are broken
they are young, but feel old.


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since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764
CA, USA
1 posted 2000-07-26 05:45 PM


short, sweet and thought provoking. Great job!!!!

Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

Wren
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since 2000-07-05
Posts 312

2 posted 2000-07-26 06:27 PM


This poem is neat and kinda scary....cool concept! Great job!  
-Wren

The thread of destiny
Unknown by anyone
Unseen by anyone
Winds around your heart
Moist with tears
-Vampire Princess Miyu Theme

Broken_Heart
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since 2000-07-24
Posts 57
Netherlands
3 posted 2000-07-26 07:37 PM


Quite interresting... Love the part of
they want to be
as good as gold
they are really goddesses
(or so they're told)
Cause I know of girls who act that way...
Beautiful...
Sincerely Broken_Heart

Darkness upholds Light as much as Holiness downs the Evil within...

JohnDLeclare
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since 2000-07-26
Posts 43

4 posted 2000-07-26 07:55 PM


Makes me sad. I guess that should not be a surprise considering the title of the forum.

John D

Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
5 posted 2000-07-27 10:28 PM


Chibi...this is indeed a sad commentary of a segment of our society.  I always enjoy seeing things through your eyes.  Hardrock
kynder
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since 2000-04-11
Posts 537
Tallahassee, Florida
6 posted 2000-08-01 10:47 PM


good job!!! this is very powerful.  very well done.  thank you for sharing!!

kynder

Sunshine can not bleach
The snow,
Nor time unmake what
Poets know.

Ralph Waldo Emerson

Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
7 posted 2000-08-01 10:54 PM


Cloned picture perfect girls such as these, are scary and in my opinion deserve pity.  For they never could, never have and never will fight for their true selves, their individuality.  They live now and pay later..
A sad existance..  Thought provoking - great work!!  

I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn.....
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



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