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Hardrock
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0 posted 07-26-2000 10:56 AM       View Profile for Hardrock   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Hardrock

To Catalinamoon...simply amazing that we came up with poems on the same subject so close together.  GMTA (Great Minds Think Alike).  Enjoy.

The Friend

I sat there in the barroom,
My mind off somewhere far.
She drifted in on a heat blast,
And sat with me at the bar.

"Thereís a heat wave out there, Darliní,
Or donít you watch TV?"
Well, itís not near as hot, as what I got,
Going on inside of me.

"Oh, feeling a little fiesty?", said she,
And gave me a little wink.
"Well, Iíll sit here, you buy the beer,
And Iíll tell you what I think."

"I think that youíre just lonely,
And maybe youíve felt pain.
ĎCause you ainít sitting here drinkiní,
Just to get out of the rain."

"The only rain thatís fallen,
Is probably the tears in your eyes.
Youíre tired of life, you hate the pain,
And you canít live with the lies."

"So you hide away in this barroom,
And try to drink your troubles away.
But when you go home, the nightmares come,
So youíre back here every day."

"That isnít the way to be liviní,
That isnít the way to have fun.
You need to get out, breathe some air,
Take a long, long walk in the sun."

"This ainít free advice Iím giviní,
ĎCause you know Iím a working girl too.
But business is slow, Iíve got nowhere to go,
So this is what Iím gonna do."

"Letís get out of this smoky ole barroom,
You come back to my place with me.
Weíll sit on the couch and talk about life,
And Iíll fix us a cup of hot tea."

"You donít have to live with those nightmares,
You donít have to carry those scars.
You donít have to waste your life away,
Sittiní in smoky ole bars."

"My love will overcome it,
Iíll drive them right out of your head.
And I can work my magic,
Without taking you into my bed."

"We both know that Iím a hooker,
We both know what I do.
What you donít know, but Iíll gladly show,
Is the secret to how to cure you."

"That secret is my friendship,
And my never tiriní ear.
So talk till all the demons go Ďway,
Iíll be sittiní right over here."

We talked on to the morning,
I cried and then she held me tight.
When I left in the sun, looking forward to fun,
I no longer feared the night.

Amazing, the power of friendship,
And some unlikely sources we find.
Because of a kind hearted hooker,
Iíve finally found my peace of mind.

Marv Hardin  07/20/00




[This message has been edited by Hardrock (edited 07-26-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Marv Hardin - All Rights Reserved
catalinamoon
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1 posted 07-26-2000 11:13 AM       View Profile for catalinamoon   Email catalinamoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit catalinamoon's Home Page   View IP for catalinamoon

Marvin, what a happy story. And of course GMTA, we already knew that. Also an interesting and well conceived poem, of course. And the power of friendship is strong indeed, even offered by someone you may never see again.
Peace and Love always..
MMoonchild
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2 posted 07-26-2000 11:46 AM       View Profile for MMoonchild   Email MMoonchild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit MMoonchild's Home Page   View IP for MMoonchild

wow...there were so many phrases in here I  thought about deeply..although it is me feeling this

"The only rain thatís fallen,
Is probably the tears in your eyes.
Youíre tired of life, you hate the pain,
And you canít live with the lies."


but   someone else doing this

"So you hide away in this barroom,
And try to drink your troubles away.
But when you go home, the nightmares come,
So youíre back here every day."

and I can't make the two iron themselves out...

sighing I did like the idea of friends..and I was told once to never turn my back on someone  who  may want to be  a friend as you never know if that will be the "friend for life"

~~soft thanks for a wonderful story
Maureen

Dark_kisses_Within
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3 posted 07-26-2000 12:05 PM       View Profile for Dark_kisses_Within   Email Dark_kisses_Within   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Dark_kisses_Within's Home Page   View IP for Dark_kisses_Within

WOW Marv!! That was a great poem/story.   

The glory of friendhship
The memories in sight
Love is in the air
No matter how we fight

Look high into the sky
And wish upon that star
Your wishes may be granted
Developing love from afar  

Peace
DkW


Once there was a darkness
Deep and endless night
You gave me everything you had
Ahhhhhh you gave me light

jwesley
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Posts 6413
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4 posted 07-26-2000 12:32 PM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

Wonderfully written/conceived poem/story, my friend.  Well done, indeed.

jwesley
L Tiuch
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5 posted 07-26-2000 03:31 PM       View Profile for L Tiuch   Email L Tiuch   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for L Tiuch

What a great, well written "story".  It fascinates me as to the many guises friendship can take, and saddens me that so many "friends" remain strangers because we don't let them in.  Nice work.  Linda
SpitFire
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6 posted 07-26-2000 04:07 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~Marvin,...this is simply amazing and holds such a true and meaningful and heart worthy message! I love it. Could picture the entire thing and fell right into it from the start. You rock the dock baby!!! Be well H. *Peace.
Deborah1
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7 posted 07-26-2000 05:56 PM       View Profile for Deborah1   Email Deborah1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Deborah1

"Top Shelf" as they say, just an excellent piece of work!!! Friends come in many forms, the secret is letting them in, so good Hardrock, so good!!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar
Wren
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8 posted 07-26-2000 06:03 PM       View Profile for Wren   Email Wren   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wren

This poem is sooooo sweet! And it has such heart! I really enjoyed it! Wow!
-Wren

The thread of destiny
Unknown by anyone
Unseen by anyone
Winds around your heart
Moist with tears
-Vampire Princess Miyu Theme
lotharingia
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Posts 895
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9 posted 07-29-2000 11:51 AM       View Profile for lotharingia   Email lotharingia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit lotharingia's Home Page   View IP for lotharingia

Marvin,
wouldn't it be nice if that happened?
If you ever write a poem that is less than astounding I will eat a broom!


Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo


jwesley
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10 posted 07-29-2000 01:02 PM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

Just reread this - still think it's great!!

jwesley
Lynne Dale
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11 posted 07-29-2000 10:49 PM       View Profile for Lynne Dale   Email Lynne Dale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lynne Dale

Marvin, This is top shelf poetry. Kinda reminded me of a hooker I once knew. Who talked more than she worked and she still made a fortune. Oh yes and tea was her drink.

Great stuff.
Kethry

Kethry.
When dark of night steals your soul. Think of me and be made whole.

DJLI
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Posts 239
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12 posted 07-30-2000 12:13 AM       View Profile for DJLI   Email DJLI   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DJLI

first this just shows you can't judge a book by its cover...and its nice to find poeple who'll listen to you ramble on about how life is treating you and help you feel better...great job...i really, really liked this one.

EVEN ANGELS FALL.
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13 posted 07-30-2000 03:05 AM       View Profile for Xeonox   Email Xeonox   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Xeonox

This is the best poem I have ever read in my whole life. For reals. Great job.

Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).
Nikolette Sadness
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14 posted 07-30-2000 03:12 AM       View Profile for Nikolette Sadness   Email Nikolette Sadness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nikolette Sadness

it seemed too long to read but i am glad i finished it...veyr heartfelt and intimate.
           Nikolette Sadness

i was once in love and happy...but you can call me Sadness.
beowulf_26
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15 posted 07-30-2000 03:25 AM       View Profile for beowulf_26   Email beowulf_26   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for beowulf_26

I'm sitting here having read only two of your poems and I must say that I am completely in awe of your talent.  You have a wonderful way with the language that conveys emotion, plot, and opinion while entertaining the reader.  Simply masturful.
Virtual Abyss
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16 posted 04-10-2008 02:27 AM       View Profile for Virtual Abyss   Email Virtual Abyss   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Virtual Abyss

Marv,

Your the best!  It's almost time to try my first post.  Thanks for the encouragement and the friendship!  I'm looking forward to taking the plunge.

Awesome poem again!

Your bud,

Dennis - AKA: Virtual Abyss

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