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catalinamoon
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since 2000-06-03
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The Shores of Alone

0 posted 2000-07-25 09:43 PM




I hate it when you're gone from me,
your coolness makes me hurt.
Some days I feel you're really here,
most days I feel like dirt.

I wait for you to call or write,
you know it means so much.
And still you let life interfere,
no time for us to touch.

Yes,I know you want me
wrapped up tightly in your arms.
To hold me close and love me
(and leave with the alarm..)

What good is this, such wasted love,
I know it should be more.
I dare not mention it to you
for fear you'll close the door.

Hopeless, helpless, hurtful love,
but love it will remain,
you come, you go, you barely stay
and leave behind my pain.

And still I welcome you each time,
my arms are open wide.
Just please don't go and leave me
while they hang limp at my side.

The chance of future happiness
may seem remote at best.
I know that if I persevere,
this love will stand the test.

You'll finally come right to my side
and tell me it is done.
Regardless of the consequence
you know I am the one.

I wait, I know it will come soon.
I swear it will this time.
I see the looks my friends give me,
they think it's all a lie.

But they don't know you as I do,
the brilliant, perfect man.
The promises you make to me,
someday you'll make a stand.

I'll feel your arms bring back the light
and send the beasts away.
The warmth of love is mine again.
A truly happy day..


written with hope, for K.


[This message has been edited by catalinamoon (edited 07-26-2000).]

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Hardrock
Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
1 posted 2000-07-25 09:57 PM


Oh Sandra...I DO hope he comes to you.  A love this good should not be denied.  Hardrock
SpitFire
Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

2 posted 2000-07-25 09:58 PM


~Cat,...such an interesting title. This is sooo well put! Really. WoW. "I dare not mention it to you for fear you'll close the door", EXACTLY!!! You have formed these words to tell this tale of longing with a bit of hope. Superb You. Take care S. *Peace.
Deborah1
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since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
3 posted 2000-07-25 10:33 PM


Oh I so hope too that this love will not be denied..someday soon!!! I want to be the first to share in your happiness!!! Well written, loved it!!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

lotharingia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
4 posted 2000-07-26 04:53 AM


I, too, have my fingers crossed for you! A lovely poem, from the heart!

Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo



LarBear
Member
since 2000-06-23
Posts 138
Kingston, New York
5 posted 2000-07-26 08:07 AM


Cat,

What a excellent, well written, emotional poem. Can you simply write about anything?

Your an excellent writter, Sandra.

Keep up that great poetry.

Larry

Chere
Junior Member
since 2000-07-26
Posts 18

6 posted 2000-07-26 01:51 PM


I thoroughly enjoyed this poem!  Your thoughts are very well put.  The rhythm is engaging, as I was taken to a place that is quite familiar.  And so I thank you for sharing your lovely thirst and quenching the hearts divine*  

Chere

Wren
Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312

7 posted 2000-07-26 07:15 PM


Cat-
This poem is very touching... I hope this guy of yours settles down with you soon!  
Great post!
-Wren

The thread of destiny
Unknown by anyone
Unseen by anyone
Winds around your heart
Moist with tears
-Vampire Princess Miyu Theme

JohnDLeclare
Junior Member
since 2000-07-26
Posts 43

8 posted 2000-07-26 07:37 PM


Sad , touching and hopeful all at once

John D

Dedreia
Member
since 2000-07-10
Posts 172
Kokomo, Indiana, United States
9 posted 2000-07-27 05:44 AM


I don't see how he could possibly resist you my dear...good luck and I hope it happens soon...Dee


kynder
Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537
Tallahassee, Florida
10 posted 2000-08-01 10:11 PM


see what wonders you find when you dig in the  last 5 days pile!!  wonderful work moonbeam.  truly.  you really speak my heart and mind sometimes.  i love the way you write.  thank you for sharing.  

kynder

Sunshine can not bleach
The snow,
Nor time unmake what
Poets know.

Ralph Waldo Emerson

athena4
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since 2000-12-10
Posts 622

11 posted 2000-12-13 08:37 AM


Sandra, the man isn't improper, just his actions toward you. I always wish for you that he will become the proper gentleman that you so want and deserve.  You are too beautiful to feel the way he's made you feel.
        Elise

Broken_Winged_Angel
Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994
Small Town, Somewhere
12 posted 2000-12-13 10:53 PM


Hmmm...This is very interesting in the things it makes me feel and remember.  I really enjoyed reading it.  And I hope you have the strength to either hold on, or let go when the time is right.  
Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
13 posted 2000-12-15 04:00 PM


This was amazing. I really liked this poem....wow



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


allan
Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620
On the road
14 posted 2000-12-15 08:18 PM


Forget this guy. He's only playing with you.
Suzanne Arlene
Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 377
Ontario, Canada
15 posted 2000-12-16 09:28 AM


I feel the same way as Allan  He  is playing with you.
MysticWonders
Member
since 2000-12-11
Posts 60
Massapequa NY
16 posted 2000-12-16 06:00 PM


I can well relate to this poem...reading it through tears in my eyes...Nicely done*S*



If you can't be true to yourself...you won't be true to others :(

LM
Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585

17 posted 2000-12-17 04:13 PM


Sorry to disillusion you, but there are no perfect men, there is no perfect love and living in "Fantasia" is really nice untill cruel reality spits you right between the eyes... Hope is a necessity but you better hope for something more real than a future with a married man.
Sorry again, I'm feeling kinda down right now... but I still loved the poem, as usual a great piece!

Lady Lost
Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 470

18 posted 2000-12-17 04:26 PM


Sandra;

You are amazing.  I understand what you are going through and I hope that someday he realizes that you have been there for him, when all the other woman have come and gone, you were there.  I pray he does, you are simply wonderful!

Beth

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