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Ginners
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since 2000-07-22
Posts 339
Mullica Hill, New Jersey

0 posted 2000-07-25 05:26 PM


Cigaretts burn and smoke floats,
Time stops when I see you,
Holding a smoke and smiling,
Walking across the garage,
The way you mess with your hair,
Nothing will ever be how it was,
I'll never look at  you so lovinginly,
You'll never look back so wantingly,
Sometimes things get too hard,
Sometimes people stop caring,
Sometimes nothing else matters,
And sometimes people fall apart
Things change and people leave,
I still cry when I think of you,
Sitting in the dark and crying,
Lying on my bed,
The way I remember needing you,
It will always be like this,
I'll never kiss you so meaningfully,
You'll never kiss me so sweetly,
Sometimes things get too hard,
Sometimes people stop caring,
Sometimes nothing else matters,
And sometimes people fall apart

© Copyright 2000 Gin Leigh - All Rights Reserved
MMoonchild
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since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715
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1 posted 2000-07-25 07:21 PM


Ginners...this is one sad, well written expression

~~soft thoughts
Maureen

catalinamoon
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since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
2 posted 2000-07-25 08:38 PM


Ginners, this is the first I have seen from you. I feel like I could have written this myself. I can see the man walking in the garage smoking. I can smell the smoke. Wonderfully visual, and poignant sense of loss. I have been there, and am still there.
Take care.Catalinamoon

tookabear
Junior Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 28
Mansfield, TX USA
3 posted 2000-07-25 08:43 PM


What a beautiful poem... you have an amazing talent.  I, too, have lain on my bed and cried countless times over losses... the wonderful thing is most of the losses have turned out to be gains.  You'll pull through.. keep writing.  
SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

4 posted 2000-07-25 09:36 PM


~Your words have painted a very vivid picture in my mind. Great work. So sad, so well written. Take care G. *Peace.
taramw
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

5 posted 2000-07-25 09:42 PM


Ginners, this is fabulous! Yes, you certainly do have a talent    Yep, it is real sad when things fall apart, isn't it?  Thanks for sharing this  
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