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Broken_Heart
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since 2000-07-24
Posts 57
Netherlands

0 posted 2000-07-25 08:26 AM


I find comfort in the fact that so many of you write about the feelings I have... Now I don't feel so alone... Thanks for the replies everyone!


I Bleed, I Die

Sorrow overtakes my life
You have left me in the cold
While my heart still yurns
For your Beauty to behold

I scream inside myself
Why do you keep hurting me?
Is my suffering not enough?
What more pain do you need to see?

I bleed to death slowly
I cannot live inside a lie
And untill the day you return
I bleed, I die...


Darkness upholds Light as much as Holiness downs the Evil within...

© Copyright 2000 Jean Phillippe Wijnholds - All Rights Reserved
Nick_UK
Junior Member
since 2000-07-21
Posts 10

1 posted 2000-07-25 08:50 AM


I like this.  Especially the last verse.
SpitFire
Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

2 posted 2000-07-25 11:59 AM


~Mmm,...wonderful verse here. So full of sorrow, yet said so well. Take care BH. *Peace.
misscris
Junior Member
since 2000-07-17
Posts 27
Leawood, KS, USA
3 posted 2000-07-25 03:13 PM


I'm generally on the other end of relationships, until recently and your poem so eloquently summed up my feelings and undoubtably the feelings that I have put others through in the past...Thanks for the enlightenment. Take care.
misscris
"We should live forever, or die trying."

thebeautybrat
Member
since 2000-03-30
Posts 114
Florida
4 posted 2000-07-25 03:18 PM


i loved this poem!! your words have such a powerful meaning!! excellent job!!

If you let love in your life you are either going to be happy or sad for the rest of your life.


JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
5 posted 2000-07-25 08:00 PM


This is beautiful and sorrowful poetry.     I have known this sorrow of which you speak..it will bring new pain each day until you can let it go...I hope the time is approaching near for you...take care...James
ChibiDeathscythe
Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 128

6 posted 2000-07-25 09:00 PM


This describes such a deep pain...when I read this I literally ached inside.....very good work.
taramw
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

7 posted 2000-07-25 09:17 PM



Well done! Great poem    Especially the line I scream inside myself.

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