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Deborah1
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since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire

0 posted 2000-07-25 07:23 AM




Then she says
" This is not how I pictured it"
The words, razor sharp,cut...
And then I went numb from the wound

There are no plans
My son doesn't know his grammy
I can't make plans..
I need my mother
She can never plan anything

A lump forms in my throat
There is no defense
All I feel is sick
The sickness is everywhere...
Filling the room

I feel the anxiety
I said NO caffine!!.in my coffee
She must of made a mistake..
Im shaky

I want to scream
I am a grandmother
Im sorry!!
I miss him too...

You will never know this pain
My heart aching so..it hurts
I think of him everyday
My thoughts now jumbling
With her words

She has no-one
I was going to be the one
Her voice..But its amazing
How he loves her for the little
time he sees her

The room closes in
I want to run
I want to be someone else

Tears pour out of my eyes....
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The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

[This message has been edited by Deborah1 (edited 07-25-2000).]

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Broken_Heart
Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 57
Netherlands
1 posted 2000-07-25 08:28 AM


Lovely poem, Deborah1... It actually touched me, and this does not happen often... The confusion and anger in it are great. Hope to see more of your work in the future!


Darkness upholds Light as much as Holiness downs the Evil within...

misscris
Junior Member
since 2000-07-17
Posts 27
Leawood, KS, USA
2 posted 2000-07-25 03:46 PM


Experiencing loss of any kind is awful and you express this in the style of your poem which builds up, up, up to the climax of confusion.  I look forward to some more of your moving work.
misscris

catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
3 posted 2000-07-25 08:29 PM


Oh Deb, so much pain, but you know I have faith that this situation will improve for you. Written beautifully, and from the heart
Hardrock
Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
4 posted 2000-07-25 09:35 PM


Deb..the words meant nothing to me..I had no point of reference.  But the pain, the deep emotions, the anguish was so distinct..I could feel it.  Excellent.  Hardrock
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