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Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23
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of Depression

0 posted 2000-07-25 05:42 AM


Struggling on, he keeps moving,
With each step, his life proving,
Get away, from there to home,
Place of death, he’s removing
Battered self, he comes alone,
Falls at feet, with painful groan,
Once many, now he’s the first,
Returns cut, with broken bone,
But alive, most were much worse,
Song of dead, in the last verse,
Silent tune, for none moving,
Death follows, the warring curse.

Gloom 2000



© Copyright 2000 Aszard Drazlom - All Rights Reserved
taramw
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

1 posted 2000-07-25 05:48 AM


Wow! Excellent poem!    You certainly put imagery to mind.
Broken_Heart
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since 2000-07-24
Posts 57
Netherlands
2 posted 2000-07-25 05:56 AM


Great poem, I felt really dark reading it...
Makes me think of life on the dark side again! Keep up the good work!


Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082
of Depression
3 posted 2000-07-25 06:02 AM


Thank you both,
taramw & Broken_Heart,
The dark side images sear my brain,
drive me from happiness
so nothing will remain.

your words, your response
makes my words and scattering of words
worthwhile.

Gloom

Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
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New Hampshire, USA
4 posted 2000-07-25 08:17 PM


PG..good stuff here son.  It made be look behind the words to see the true meaning.  Hardrock
Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23
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5 posted 2000-07-26 05:26 AM


Well, thanks Hardrock old man,
I guess the point of this is to make others to think, and see another perspective in their thoughts.  It seems I was successful.
Thank you for taking the time to respond.

Gloom

MMoonchild
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since 2000-07-13
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6 posted 2000-07-26 10:19 AM


well as  he struggles and keeps on moving  doesn't he improve his life at all?
me just questioning...

~~M

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