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sgreybe
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since 2000-04-28
Posts 209
London, UK

0 posted 2000-07-25 04:23 AM


PLEASE SEE ME:

You look at me
But you don't see me
You listen to me
Yet you don't hear me

I stand beside you
But you're far away
My heart tremors
Yet you don't feel me

The sands of my time
Drain beside you
But you don't notice
And you don't catch me

I pour myself out
But you don't care
You don't even realise
When I'm not there.

© Copyright 2000 Sylvia Greybe - All Rights Reserved
taramw
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

1 posted 2000-07-25 05:40 AM


Ohhhh this is such a hearfelt poem.  If I have read it correctly... it is real sad when you truly love / want somebody, but they don't even realise - or, even worse, WANT to realise!  Expressed very well sgreybe  
SpitFire
Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

2 posted 2000-07-25 12:20 PM


~S,...relating to this poem is bringing ache to my heart. Well expressed. Take care. *Peace.
Dark_kisses_Within
Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas
3 posted 2000-07-25 01:32 PM


Oh boy... dont we all know this feeling so well.    You expressed it wonderfully.  I could feel the heartache in it so vividly.  Great job!  

DkW


Once there was a darkness
Deep and endless night
You gave me everything you had
Ahhhhhh you gave me light


thebeautybrat
Member
since 2000-03-30
Posts 114
Florida
4 posted 2000-07-25 03:04 PM


i've felt these exact hurtful feelings before. when i was going through it these were my thoughts exactly!! nice work!!

If you let love in your life you are either going to be happy or sad for the rest of your life.


Deborah1
Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
5 posted 2000-07-25 03:13 PM


Oh so very well said!! I know that feeling of someone not "seeing" me and feeling unheard. Excellent job!!!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

Hardrock
Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
6 posted 2000-07-25 05:05 PM


Sylvia...this hurts worse than physical pain.  Blind, benign neglect.  No better words could have expressed it.  Hardrock
Big Bear
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since 2000-07-25
Posts 2

7 posted 2000-07-25 09:09 PM


i work with peopel that think this way.  this really hits home with the people i work with.
catalinamoon
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since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
8 posted 2000-07-26 11:55 AM


Sylvia, this is such a painful feeling, being unheard, unseen, untouched. You expressed it perfectly.
Take care.

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