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Ravenna: The Immortal Saga Continues

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Poet deVine
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She rode an Arabian stallion
Out of the morning mist
The darkness of her hair
Matched the mane held in her fist

Clad in softest leather garb
Her skin of deepest tan
The goal for this immortal one
Was to find a mortal man

Her clan of immortal sisters
Would die out without this deed
So riding now, Ravenna sought
A man for his mortal seed.

Each village she approached
Seemed void of virile men
Haggard women stared at her
With looks beyond her ken

Farther from her clan she rode
Until she reached the sea
There upon the horizon was
The answer to this mystery

Four majestic ships lay cradled
In the azure waves off shore
Sunk low upon the ocean
Weighed down by the cargo they bore

A boat filled with captive men
Being hoisted onto the craft
Pushed and prodded onto the deck
Tied together fore and aft.

The need for mortal seed was great
One man was all she required
The rest would be a burden
Until a child could be sired

She strapped her silver dagger
To a pouch within her vest
Then jumped into the water
Swimming quickly to the west

She climbed the anchor chain
As quietly as she could
And slipped onto the deck
Where the night sentry stood

With a swoop of her wrist
The sentryís neck was slashed
Then she hurried to the hold
Where the village men were lashed

In the darkened space she sought
A man who would quicken her blood
She scanned the room until she saw
A tall and virile stud

With stealth she untied his legs
And bid him follow her out
Quickly he obeyed wondering
What this girl was about.

On the moonlit deck again
She cut the ropes from his wrists
Then led him into the ocean
And swam away into the mists

As they reached the sandy shore
Ravenna called her stallion forth
Bade the mortal to mount her horse
And rode off to the north.

The mortal man rode pillion
Arms clasped around her waist
His breath hot upon her cheek
She squirmed in his embrace.

The trip to the immortal camp
Lasted only a day and night
Ravenna wished her captive
Would at least have put up a fight

He seemed to sense his destiny
As father to an immortal child
But as he rode, he fondled her
Driving Ravenna wild

The leader of the clan
Took the captive to her cave
Until it was decided
Which member he would have

Ravenna paced all that night
Her passionís blood inflamed
The village stud had quickened her
And needed to be tamed.

Morning dawned fair and mild
The leader drew the clan near
And said the mortal man agreed
To bed an immortal here

Ravenna wished she would not
Be chosen to bed the man
For after seeding immortal wench
He met death by immortal hand

Ravenna mounted her stallion
And quickly rode away
She chose not to be the one
To bed the man this day

Two days passed as she rode
To banish him from her mind
And when she returned to the clan
His death had been consigned.

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thebeautybrat
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1 posted 07-25-2000 12:02 AM       View Profile for thebeautybrat   Email thebeautybrat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for thebeautybrat

by bed did you mean kill? i'm not quite sure i'm able to understand this correctly. it was written very well i'm just not really sure about all the details. it gave me a picture but it wasn't too clear to me. i'm sure many people will understand but my poetry mind still has much to learn. nice work!
Poet deVine
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2 posted 07-25-2000 12:06 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Thank you for your reply. By 'bed' I mean just that..but in my Immortal Women series, they have to mate with a mortal man, then kill him if they can.
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3 posted 07-25-2000 12:17 AM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Just amazing. . .absolutely amazing. . .

Superb. . .

----------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

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4 posted 07-25-2000 12:24 PM       View Profile for Verve   Email Verve   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Verve


WOW ... I love this poem! Really dig stuff like this ... Astounding piece of work!

~verve
Rex
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5 posted 07-25-2000 02:42 PM       View Profile for Rex   Email Rex   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rex's Home Page   View IP for Rex

PDV....Great! Just absolutely great. Really enjoy the story and love the style. Many kudos!!!

Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility.

-William Wordsworth-
Deborah1
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6 posted 07-25-2000 03:10 PM       View Profile for Deborah1   Email Deborah1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Deborah1

PDV..This poem was a wonderful adventure, I was along for the journey..Just amazing how you draw the reader in!!! Very nicely done!! Love your work!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar
Hardrock
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7 posted 07-25-2000 09:29 PM       View Profile for Hardrock   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Hardrock

PdV...I hang suspended on every line.  Let the saga continue...please.  Hardrock
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8 posted 07-25-2000 09:33 PM       View Profile for taramw   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for taramw

Wow!  Superb!  Like a movie running through my head... thanks for the wonderful read!  
wayoutwalt
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9 posted 07-26-2000 12:38 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

lovely tale miss devine no matter where i find you posting its always well worth the read!!
Christopher
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10 posted 07-26-2000 02:08 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Ok Sharon... How do you do it? You manage to even put your strength and heart into a piece such as this... Amazing lady, a tale worth telling, and you've told it exceedingly well!
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11 posted 07-26-2000 06:01 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

This is DeVine my dear poet...some lovely lines within this piece...fabulous lines..
One question remains...if the child is a son does he get the ax?   I am sure this will be no problem for your creative mind... James
Poet deVine
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Thank you all...btw, James...Immortal women only bear girls...thus, they need mortal men to procreate!  
Chere
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13 posted 07-26-2000 02:34 PM       View Profile for Chere   Email Chere   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Chere

This poem deserves publication in its finest!  I loved it!!  

~Looking forward to reading more of your work!

Chere
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14 posted 07-26-2000 07:03 PM       View Profile for Wren   Email Wren   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wren

Awsome.... There should be a book! This is really neat!
-Wren

The thread of destiny
Unknown by anyone
Unseen by anyone
Winds around your heart
Moist with tears
-Vampire Princess Miyu Theme
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15 posted 07-26-2000 07:47 PM       View Profile for JohnDLeclare   Email JohnDLeclare   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JohnDLeclare

As a mortal man I am going to go hide under my mortal bed. It seemed so real  

John D
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Thank you all! I appreciate your kind words! And men, better watch out..if these ladies are immortal, it means there are still some around!  
demoninlove
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Wonderful writing Poet Divine! Dont stop!
Deepak

Lynne Dale
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There are no words to describe the way my emotions were stirred.
Kethry

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19 posted 05-23-2002 02:24 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Hey, ah remember this! And damn if ah don't love i'!

She said burn ... together.
-TON

 
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