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Click
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since 2000-06-11
Posts 202
USA

0 posted 2000-07-24 06:03 PM



        Drawn by you,
         like a moth
        to the flame.

        Singed my wings,
       but I stil remain.

        Eratic flight,
        almost through.

        I won't stop,
    until consumed by you.  


Click



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lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
1 posted 2000-07-25 05:10 AM


Hey, wow. This is really good. Drawn to what you know will hurt ...

Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo



taramw
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

2 posted 2000-07-25 05:33 AM


Great use of words!    Imagined it exactly... fabulous poem  
Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082
of Depression
3 posted 2000-07-25 05:57 AM


brief, but good,
compact emotionalization.

Gloom

Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
4 posted 2000-07-25 08:12 PM


I agree with all the above, Click.  Nice work.  Hardrock
catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
5 posted 2000-07-25 08:43 PM


I LOVE this, Click. Really really good. Spoke to me directly. Perfect use of few words. Awesome..
Catalinamoon

tookabear
Junior Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 28
Mansfield, TX USA
6 posted 2000-07-25 08:47 PM


This poem really touched me... I have been in several abusive relationships, somehow drawn to guys I knew would only hurt me, seeming to fall even harder.  I really love this poem.. thank you for allowing me to read it.
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