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The Silences Of Me
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The Silences Of Me |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396
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The Silences Of Me Etched in walkways from the park to home, are the silences of me. The story of the times passing, the tales of the truth to be had. Etched in walkways from the park to home, are the footprints of every tear that walk me home at night. Fingerprints for the words I had touched and my breath on the wind in tune. The prints of knees in concrete, where I sang out my anger and wept in this city of stars. Etched in walkways from the park to home, is the litter of my stains,... my scars and their reeking wounds, remains in trails under the leaves in the fall. Snow and rain can't wash them away, they have been drunk by the roots of the antique trees in nights of needing, and linger in ways to the door. They are,...the silences of me. |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
How does one describe a poem like this? What words? What.....? Exceptional seems so inadequate. I'll just say, Beautiful. Hardrock |
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LarBear Member
since 2000-06-23
Posts 138Kingston, New York |
SpitFire, I love this one SF. The way you describe the emotions, fears and pain, and gentaly mend them together with the sidewalk. Very good. I can relate too. I keep silient and hold my emotions. LarBear |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
Great! The discription was very pretty, eloquent. I enjoyed this one! Another winner from the great SF! -Wren The thread of destiny Unknown by anyone Unseen by anyone Winds around your heart Moist with tears -Vampire Princess Miyu Theme |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
God girl, you never stop amazing me with your brilliant use of words. Awesome.. Cat.. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Take your bows yet again Spitfire!! Words to describe this piece, I too, am at a loss!! I'll go for an exception, beautiful, visual journey... WOW!!  I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
Quite a scilence you have there. What one says through one's thought is heard louder than when one speaks. Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
I love it when I get the vision, capture the writers feelings, this is exceptional!!! A Blue Ribbon award here!! The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Beautiful, Spitfire!! I don't know quite what to say either!! Very nice!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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L Tiuch Member
since 2000-02-04
Posts 151NY |
How sadly beautiful. It amazes me that whatever I read here I can relate to. Thanks for the welcome. Linda |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Spitfire, I can picture you here, walking alone and forlorn, remembering ... How do you always manage to write such brilliant poetry? Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Your writing is becoming even more intense I had better start building a porch upon which to ponder over your words. THis one aches, your words seem to be getting dark I just hope this is not a true reflection of your life. Take care and peace. "A frog, it cannot comprehend the sea Nor me happiness" Paul Draper-Mansun |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Your silence sings beautifully! |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
I feel this poem Spitfire. This is the second such of yours that has truly touched me in some way. I hope you continue, for 'tis rare to be taken so with a poem. Bravo. Christopher Now with the wisdom of years I try to reason things out And the only people I fear Are those who never have doubt. -Billy Joel |
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Ian Llewellyn ap-Griffith Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 197Cincinnati, Oh, U.S.A. |
How many nights have I walked your way? Nicely done. Sing while you may |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
adding this to my library, Spitfire... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Yes...very well done....James |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Thanks for the resurrection S'en. It's interesting sometimes to see the difference between the "old" and the "new." I recall this being the second of your poems I read lady - Having read others more recently... I see perhaps things haven't changed so much, eh? Peace, C |
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Click Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 202USA |
You have a "fan club", and I can see why......good poem!!! Thanx!! Click |
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ill_tactics Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 149 |
This poem deserves a quick applause. The wording is excellent. Hope to see more of your work. Much love, one love peace..... |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
may i say, it gets no better than reading spitfire poetry!! girl you have outdone yourself with this one. simply divine. love always, kynder "Full is not heavy as empty, not nearly, my love, not nearly...." Fiona Apple |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
A wonderful poem.....simply wonderful!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
You've got yourself a way with words Spitfire... loving this.. K The wind shifts like this: Like a human without illusions... This is how the wind shifts: Like a human, heavy and heavy, Who does not care. W.S |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
wow. i don't really know where to start except that this was amazing. i think it was the line about knees in the concrete that really got me. this was truly fabulous. jann elizabeth If you can feel that staying human is worthwhile, even when it can't have any result whatever, you've beaten them. -1984 |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
This is great! I always love a poem about the past. |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
Wonderous use of words to express such lonliness. Great write. Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Night Chica Junior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 39Vermont |
Spitfire - Everytime I lurk around here I always check out your poems and here's a prime example of why; you have such an extraordinary way with words, my friend! Wonderful work! Megs I was never one to patiently pick up broken fragments and glue them together again and tell myself that the mended whole was as good as new. What is broken is broken- and I'd rather remember it as it was at its best than mend it and see the broken places as long as I lived. -- Margaret Mitchell |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~I figure while this thing's still out here t'would be a good time to Thank ALL of you! Wow, can't believe the visitors to this....you are beautiful people and I thank you for taking the time. Each of you. I really do. Take care of yourselves now. *Peace. |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
I have to agree with all the others this poem breathes life, it's a little of us all, Sometimes the invisible is not seen but felt very strongly as you have said our imprints go in so many things yet sometimes no one really knows. Beautifully written. |
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Suzanne Arlene Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 377Ontario, Canada |
Beautiful poem.Alot to think about. Thank you for sharing it |
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stoned' Junior Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 14 |
Beautiful words ..a very lovely poem! keep posting its the best one YET!! |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
A very strong, well versed piece, holding true to emotion. Imagery is clear and promotes the "feel" of sadness. |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
and this is not only beautiful but quite well thought out .. good job P |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
This is powerful! Loved it! Speaks volumes.~ Tara ~ soul dying... heart crying. |
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Zyell Member
since 2000-07-28
Posts 121USA |
wow, I noticed the number of responses, and I thought, hey i want to read this one. I wasn't disappointed~ uniquely done, and effectively felt....excellent~ Z "I am an abstract of Circles" |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
Saw this one again and came in to read it. For the second time around, I have to say... It's just as powerful as the first read. With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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