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When Love Is Gone |
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L Tiuch Member
since 2000-02-04
Posts 151NY |
The blackness of night envelops me as I lie awake. The angry shouts still echo in my mind. The slamming door, the childrens' cries so real they shatter the now still silence. My head swims with overwhelming responsibility... Monsters in various forms grab for a part of me each claiming my soul. My stomach tightens and I feel it will smother my heart-my very being Pounding so like the waves of the sea taking my life, slowly, with each crashing lap onto the shore. Ugly words fly at me...puncturing the self that I am trying so desperately to cling to. The words seem to shout at me as if part of my pulse. Alone...divorce...why me? |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
The pain, the emotions, excrutiating at times...Im sorry if you are going through this, truly. Why me, the question we so often ask, Sometimes the things that are the best for us can feel the worse at that time...Though sad, excellent writing!!! Hope your ok The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hi Linda, this is the first poem of yours I have read. You have an ability to send the feelings through your words. It always hurts when love is gone, and with children invovled, even more so I think. Hope your life is happy now. Catalinamoon |
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Wow Linda what imagery you present in this one!!! I felt like I was right there, and it doesn't sound like a place I'd want to be. All I can say is your strength at times amazes me...and thank God you're not "there" anymore. How wonderfully you have written about such an awful time. Bonnie |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Hi there,...Welcome here!!! *This is my second time coming back to this....and it is just so full of feeling. So raw in it's feeling too. As Cat has said, you have the ability to send the feelings through your words,...and,...I totally agree. Great work. Be well LT. *Peace. |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Linda..I could feel the stress, the tension, the gnawing loneliness, the cold. I truly hope your life is better. If not, take heart, it will be. Well expressed. Hardrock |
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L Tiuch Member
since 2000-02-04
Posts 151NY |
Thank you all for your encouraging words. It has been 15 years since I wrote this and, yes, my life is good today. Hard times seem to strengthen a person's character and make it possible to find the good after bad. Linda |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Wow what intense feelings...you captured all the emotions well in this piece!! Very nice!! Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
Linda, I can't tell you how much this meant to me..I have felt most of those feelings...although not 15 years ago..more like an ongoing daily ritual...I think it is worse sometimes being in limbo... ~~soft ((hugs)) Maureen |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
This is so intense! I can sense that dreadful feeling. When you are left and you can't understand why. Very well done! Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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