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MMoonchild
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0 posted 2000-07-23 01:49 AM




Crystal Tears

I hide my heart, tamed for you
but below the surface
I need to love you the way I know how,
unconditionally.
Disappointments, fallen sensations
I shall let it all flow in crystal,
spilling, these raindrops of my soul.
Walking alone, tasting tears
from an opportunity missed
needing to be who I choose to be.
Could you ever see things my way?

M*2k



© Copyright 2000 Maureen - All Rights Reserved
lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
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1 posted 2000-07-23 04:14 AM


How well you express the human malaise here!
How our lives are twisted by lack of communication, how we pretend to be who we are to please others, how we make others feel they have to pretend to be someone else. And all of that often out of whims caused by people saying they want this or that and nothing else, when they don't even really know what they want.
I'm afraid I am babbling incomprehensibly.
I am so sorry.
I guess what I want to say is: follow your heart, be yourself. For to be loved for who you are not is no solution.
Thanks for waking these thoughts in my mind!


Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo



MMoonchild
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2 posted 2000-07-23 09:15 AM


WOW...I said all that, lotharingia?

yes, I guess I did...but your words made it clear to all.
~~soft smiles
Maureen


Wren
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since 2000-07-05
Posts 312

3 posted 2000-07-23 10:26 AM


Very pretty...... The images of tears were lovely. I loved the line about loving unconditionaly. Very pretty. I loved it!
-Wren

The thread of destiny
Unknown by anyone
Unseen by anyone
Winds around your heart
Moist with tears
-Vampire Princess Miyu Theme

Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
4 posted 2000-07-23 11:08 AM


MMoonchild...you are such a welcome addition to our family here.  This is so beautiful...and Lotharingia said it far better than I.  Hardrock
MMoonchild
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5 posted 2000-07-23 11:48 AM


Wren..thank you..I am inspired by this line in your signature..think I may have to create today...*s

"Winds around your heart"
~~softly
Maureen


Dedreia
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since 2000-07-10
Posts 172
Kokomo, Indiana, United States
6 posted 2000-07-23 11:51 AM


Needing to be who I choose to be,
Could you ever see things my way...
Oh my...do you know me?  This is like exactly how I have been feeling about my life...I like.  Dee


MMoonchild
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7 posted 2000-07-23 11:52 AM


Hardrock
...ahh thank you so much...and you are wrong...you  each say it wonderfully in your own way...and for each I am greatful

~~soft hugs for a "hard rock" ( trying to soften it)
Maureen
*I know that's not what you stand for..just couldn't resist this morning *w


MMoonchild
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8 posted 2000-07-23 11:54 AM


Dee, you snuck in on me while responding to Hardrock..thank you. I think many of us have had the same feelings..it's amazing to me when I use to think I was the "only" one...
~~soft hugs
Maureen

L Tiuch
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 151
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9 posted 2000-07-24 01:14 PM


This is so melancholy and sweet.  It is so important to be who and what you are.  It makes me sad to think how simpler everything would be if we let others know what we need, rather than suffering the disappointment when they can't "guess" what it is.  Blessings go out to you.  Linda  
MMoonchild
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10 posted 2000-07-24 03:40 PM


Linda, you are very sweet..I am a very moody Moonchild... a "cancer" and  I think I am in a moodswing at the moment so I am posting my darker poems here...it too shall pass...or so they say
~~soft thanks
Maureen

Click
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since 2000-06-11
Posts 202
USA
11 posted 2000-07-25 10:18 PM


Thank you for saying these words!! I ask myself who am I?  I ask my wife Who are you?  Same answer....I DON'T KNOW!!
   Wow, are we what others make us??
Or what we think others want us to be??

Click



MMoonchild
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12 posted 2000-07-25 11:36 PM


Click..I am not sure..all I know  is that we are constantly changing and sometimes for the better..sometimes for the worse..
thank you again for reading me tonight
~~softly
Maureen

Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
13 posted 2000-07-26 01:19 AM


The depth of this poem is amazing when the brevity of it is taken into consideration. You've managed to pen an entire societal issue in a mere 9 lines.

Amazing! I am impressed, and that doesn't happen too often!

Christopher

Now with the wisdom of years
I try to reason things out
And the only people I fear
Are those who never have doubt.
-Billy Joel

MMoonchild
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14 posted 2000-07-26 09:29 AM


You just put the first smile of the morning on my face, Christopher ( and believe me that is ot easily done). Thank you for the kind words...now if I can only impress you once more...*if I only remember how ir what made me write this way...

shhhhhhhh...a secret..I never remember what I wrote 'til a few days later and constantly have to go back and reread my own words ..it's either my memory failing me a bit earlier than it should...or there is someone else living inside me. *w

~~softsmiles
Maureen

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