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jennie may*
Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 122


0 posted 2000-07-23 01:15 AM


like your kiss
on my face

the
things I long to
erase

to move from here to there

I want to eat your
darker side
digest the things you
don't want me to
know
I want to touch your
red hair

melt the snow

in our hearts

and feel your hand
taking mine
again


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lotharingia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
1 posted 2000-07-23 03:12 AM


Jennie May,
this is really excellent!

These lines in particular really grab me:
I want to eat your
darker side
digest the things you
don't want me to
know



Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo



SpitFire
Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

2 posted 2000-07-24 02:04 PM


~Wow Jennie May,...diggin' this big time. How'd this one slip away? It's such a cool poem. Interesting and creative wording that caught me. Thanks. Take care JM. *Peace.
Deborah1
Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
3 posted 2000-07-24 02:38 PM


I liked all of this, especially melt the snow in our hearts!!! Very well done, hope to see more!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

LarBear
Member
since 2000-06-23
Posts 138
Kingston, New York
4 posted 2000-07-24 02:41 PM


jennie may,
I have to agree with "lotharingia" the best part is I want to eat your darker side.

Outstanding Job.

LarBear

Hardrock
Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
5 posted 2000-07-25 07:52 PM


Jennie..This is really good.  Some great thoughts expressed.  Hardrock
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