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Click
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since 2000-06-11
Posts 202
USA

0 posted 2000-07-22 10:28 PM


  What becomes of the soul,
that is wrecked upon the rocks?

  Does it break up,
and float out to sea in pieces?

  Does it founder on the Reef,
and wear its keel to splinters?  

  What becomes of the heart,
that hits the Reef of rejection?
  
  Does it sink,
in the ocean of despair?

  Does it bail,
and manage to stay afloat?

  What becomes of the mind,
that rides these waves of life?

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             Click




[This message has been edited by Click (edited 07-22-2000).]

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Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
1 posted 2000-07-22 10:49 PM


Click...interesting concept...I like it.  The analogy is great.  Hardrock
Wren
Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312

2 posted 2000-07-22 10:59 PM


yes, i agree...... great analogy!  
-Wren

The thread of destiny
Unknown by anyone
Unseen by anyone
Winds around your heart
Moist with tears
-Vampire Princess Miyu Theme

SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

3 posted 2000-07-22 11:10 PM


~"in the ocean of despair",...love this line!  This poems got me thinking,...very neat...and I agree, great analogy. Take care. *Peace.
lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
4 posted 2000-07-23 02:58 AM


Click, what questions you ask ... You make it all sound so hopeless:
"wrecked upon the rocks" "hits the Reef of rejection"
Hmmmm.
I'd say the soul realises it didn't break any bones and clambers back to shore, or maybe it gets picked up by a passing ship. And the heart, well it reels for a while, and then it changes course, gets repaired on the next shore and is good as new.
And the mind that rides the waves of life gets to see the whole, world, the sky and the ocean, in all its sublime beauty and irrational terror.
I really enjoyed your poem, BTW!
Look to the horizon, where new worlds await ...


Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo



moshpit
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since 1999-11-25
Posts 143
cebu, philippines
5 posted 2000-07-23 09:01 AM


What becomes of the mind,
that rides these waves of life?

what indeed?.. nice work, Click.

sash
Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 125

6 posted 2000-07-23 12:20 PM


I agree with You, Lotharingia. Guess I'm a sucker for a "silver lining" theory!
Click, great poem! like it more each time I read it. Hope things are going better for You. C-ya in a few!

      Your Friend,
         ~Sash~

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