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Into the Lake of Souls

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Poet deVine
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0 posted 07-22-2000 06:17 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Poet deVine

*one in a series of 'Immortal Women' poems....

Chimera awoke before the dawn
Quickly gathered her sword and shield
Their enemies were sighted nearby
And their land they would not yield

Immortal clan of women, they,
Fiercely protecting their fold
Forced to defend themselves
From mortals young and old

Their offspring left two days ago
To hide in a mountain cave
Warrior women standing now
Vowed no man would claim them slave

Battle cries piercing break of day
Mounting on their fiery steeds
Riding now to surprise the intruder
Hoping this ploy succeeds.

The surprise they intended
Was not theirs but mortal man
For they were hidden outside of camp
And knew of this sunrise plan

Immortal women die only thus
By sword thrust to the heart
Sixty women lay dead by noon
Piled on the gravediggers cart

Chimera, fallen behind a tree,
Hidden by a fallen branch
Sole survivor of her clan
Cowardice her only chance.

The cart drew the bleeding bodies
To the lake know as the ‘Weerin’
No trees would grow in brackish land
It lay desolate and barren

One by one her sisters were thrown
Into the water of black opaque
Chimera watched in silence
No sound did she make

When the mortals left the place
Amidst cheers of victory
The did not notice one immortal girl
Creep forward stealthily

The immortal sisters watery grave
Beckoned Chimera in her woe
She stood upon the bloody shore
Vowing vengeance to her foe

She slid into the lake of souls
Taking the suffering she found there
Now she was leader of the clan
Accepting her fate with a prayer

She vowed to seek the mortals
To spill their blood upon the ground
As she stood amongst the dead
The valley heard her wailing sound

Miles away the mortal army heard
The howling of the Immortal Queen
Blood ran cold upon their hearts
At the grieving Chimera’s keen

She walked for days to the mountain
Finding her sisters well and alive
None more than fourteen years old
Her destiny to teach them to survive


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Deborah1
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1 posted 07-22-2000 06:26 PM       View Profile for Deborah1   Email Deborah1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Deborah1

This is extrordinary!! Im going back to read it again!! Love your work!! Such a vision, Great job!!!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar
Wren
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2 posted 07-22-2000 09:33 PM       View Profile for Wren   Email Wren   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wren

Chilling! I love it! It has a wonderful sense of story.
-Wren

The thread of destiny
Unknown by anyone
Unseen by anyone
Winds around your heart
Moist with tears
-Vampire Princess Miyu Theme
Hardrock
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3 posted 07-22-2000 09:37 PM       View Profile for Hardrock   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Hardrock

PdV...I'm at a loss for adjectives.  I find no words to praise, no words to describe my feelings.  This is so unique, so....so....words fail me still.  More...I must see more.  Hardrock
kitkat
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4 posted 07-22-2000 10:30 PM       View Profile for kitkat   Email kitkat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kitkat

Wow--I mean WOW!!! This was fantastic. I love your writing.
AVANTI
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5 posted 07-23-2000 12:53 AM       View Profile for AVANTI   Email AVANTI   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for AVANTI

SO WELL WRITTEN...
simply charming work!


If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao

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6 posted 07-23-2000 12:59 AM       View Profile for AVANTI   Email AVANTI   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for AVANTI

have to add i loved the name {chimera}for the warrior women...and just that are these the AMAZONS that you refer too?
sorry if i sound weird but I read mythology and read something about these women who fight on their on and leave their children with their husbands
very Intresting topic...

If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao

demoninlove
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7 posted 07-23-2000 01:05 AM       View Profile for demoninlove   Email demoninlove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for demoninlove

As with all your writing - Simply Divine. This invites a Part II
Deepak

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8 posted 07-23-2000 01:11 AM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Just superb deVine. . .

Battle on warrior. ..

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Marina
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9 posted 07-23-2000 01:39 AM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

Very strong piece of writing here Sharon!!

Marina


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10 posted 07-23-2000 03:51 AM       View Profile for lotharingia   Email lotharingia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit lotharingia's Home Page   View IP for lotharingia

This is extraordinary!
Is it the first in the series?
If not, where are the others?


Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo


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11 posted 07-23-2000 08:10 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

It is not the first..it's the last one written, but surely not the last one! I will post them if you like or you can go to my website and see them - most of them are there...

Thanks for your comments.
http://www.poetdevine.com

Verve
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12 posted 07-23-2000 02:05 PM       View Profile for Verve   Email Verve   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Verve


I was wondering abt the same thing as Avanti. It did remind a little of the Amazons. But truly, this is a brilliant piece of work. I just love the mythical feel abt it!
Lynne Dale
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13 posted 07-28-2000 10:24 AM       View Profile for Lynne Dale   Email Lynne Dale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lynne Dale

PdV you truly are. I loved this. It left me speechless.
Kethry


Kethry.
as soon as you feel too old to do a thing. Do it!
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14 posted 07-28-2000 12:35 PM       View Profile for catalinamoon   Email catalinamoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit catalinamoon's Home Page   View IP for catalinamoon

I love these stories, the take you to another world, you could make a book of them.
Beautiful..
Chere
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15 posted 07-28-2000 02:01 PM       View Profile for Chere   Email Chere   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Chere

This poem truly inspires a wonderful thought in me.  You see, I have a lovely sister to whom your expression unfolds.  And so it is quite lovely indeed imagining how words of splendid imagery can pave a path to the gate of truth . . . even if only fleeting*

Thank you . . . vividly eloquent*

Chere*
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16 posted 08-01-2000 11:35 PM       View Profile for kynder   Email kynder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kynder

oh wowwwww wow wow!!! you make me want to run and read the clan of the cave bear series all over again!!!!!!!! and this is why you are an administrator, my poetic friend.  just amazing.  you should hold your head high, for you are a POET DE VINE!!!!!  

kynder

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The snow,
Nor time unmake what
Poets know.

Ralph Waldo Emerson
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17 posted 05-23-2002 01:57 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

You blow my mind! :dizzy:

She said burn ... together.
-TON

 
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