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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
Lost In you Your head rests heavy on my chest Your hair slides through my fingers Like straw spun into molten gold Do I dare breath? I hear your heartbeat as we lie here Soft Almost tangible As if I am holding The frail bird of your spirit In my shaking hands Do I dear breath? You sit up and look at me With eyes that hold the world Can I keep you forever? |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Oh wow, wren. So many ways to look at this...man to woman, father to child...such emotion. Nice one. Hardrock |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Amazing, I can place msyelf in the picture so easily. Strangely enough, this brought me right back to a time with a certain man, someone I don't even think of very often anymore. The words have a power of their own. I admire your writing, you can always feel the love in it. Cat.. |
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Magebeast Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 60 |
Wow...Just awesome. I saw it all.. |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Beautiful! Wonderful! Astounding! ETC!  Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
I would have voted for this one! Just beautifully describing feelings, and I could picture the whole thing in my mind. Excellent job!!! The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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Rex Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 482Houston, Texas |
Lovely Wren...particularly enjoyed "The frail bird of your spirit". Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility. -William Wordsworth- |
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Ian Llewellyn ap-Griffith Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 197Cincinnati, Oh, U.S.A. |
This piece conjured memories for me, thanks. Sing while you may |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
beautiful wren. why must we pray screaming? why must not death be redefined? we shut our eyes we stretch out our arms and whirl on a pane of glass-patti smith |
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chibi_dragon Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 58 |
Well beyond words... --Chibi |
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Click Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 202USA |
I have felt how my breath catches when I realize......good point made and taken, thank you!!! Click |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~My heartbeat is skipping. Wren,...I really love this one. Thank you. For sharing. Really. Take care now. *Peace. |
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