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Nick_UK
Junior Member
since 2000-07-21
Posts 10


0 posted 2000-07-21 07:43 PM


This isn't quite finished...

Leaving

Solitude in my dark space
Time leading me away
Seeking something brighter
Than the past that I forsake
Life bleeds slowly with every passing day

Almost wrote my own death
My strangled soul pleads
Throw away the pen
Burn the paper, smash the keys
Stem the flow of misery this blackness breeds

Gotta go, gotta leave
This place, no longer me
It's not so hard to break away
Harder now to shake the pain
For the past the present grieves

When you've lost your heart
You've lost your way
Suffocate the future with your old pain
Shouldn't be this hard to break away
When you don't have the heart to stay

I usually post under the name FJiznit, but I forgot my password and I can't access the email account that your password get's sent to when you try and find it out...  Never mind...  I needed a new name anyway.


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LarBear
Member
since 2000-06-23
Posts 138
Kingston, New York
1 posted 2000-07-21 07:54 PM


Firstly, I had the same thing happen too me with the password thing. I emailed RON and he helped me get it right.

The poem:"
Well, I hope that these feelings have passed and that the pen stays to write another day.
Good emotions, and a picture of a thousand words.

LarBear

catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
2 posted 2000-07-21 09:49 PM


Hey, this was very good. And all I can say is never throw away the pen, it may be our only salvation.
Catalinamoon

Hardrock
Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
3 posted 2000-07-21 11:01 PM


Nick/FJ...Nice piece here..can't wait to see the finished product.  Hardrock
Magebeast
Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 60

4 posted 2000-07-22 12:26 PM


I must agree with Hardrock and more.  If this is only part, the whole must be exceptional!
Dark_kisses_Within
Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas
5 posted 2000-07-22 01:07 AM


Well welcome back to this place we call home.    Nice poem also.  

Missed ya,
DkW

lotharingia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
6 posted 2000-07-22 04:15 AM


Haha! I knew this was you! Nick is definitely better than FJiznit, bit of a mouthful that  
Your poem is really astoundingly good. I am very impressed. Are you OK?


Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo



Deborah1
Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
7 posted 2000-07-22 08:02 AM


Oh please finish!! This is very good. I agree too, keep on writing, don't give up on anything, Ive been surprised many times n my life at how things can turn around. Thanks for sharing!!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

kynder
Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537
Tallahassee, Florida
8 posted 2000-07-23 03:52 PM


first let me say, back to have you amongst us again.  secondly, to me you will always be FJ!! hee hee!! thirdly... leaving is never really finished is it??  this is a very raw poem, and i totally relate.  i feel sometimes if i stopped writing then i wouldn't feel it so much or as strongly... ok now i am rambling.  love this!! keep it up!!  

kynder

Sunshine can not bleach
The snow,
Nor time unmake what
Poets know.

Ralph Waldo Emerson

thebeautybrat
Member
since 2000-03-30
Posts 114
Florida
9 posted 2000-07-24 11:23 PM


this poem has probably been on here a long time but i haven't been in this forum for a while i i was looking at what all i've missed! i've missed an excelent poem! did you ever write the rest of it Nick? i hope so! i need to read it!
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