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Deborah1
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since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire

0 posted 2000-07-21 03:28 PM




A menu of
Your endless schemes
The lost and lonely nights
Ascend upon my shipwrecked heart
As I swallow my last bite

A buffet of your secrets
Betrayal on the side
Your lies well done
At this table for one
Is what my bill implies

I've looked it over carefully
My appetite is lost
My head held high
As I walk by..
Im designed..to cover the cost


The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

© Copyright 2000 Deborah Murphy - All Rights Reserved
Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
1 posted 2000-07-21 05:35 PM


Whoaaa!!  You go girl!!  That's telling him!! Lady's got some class!!  This one really pumped me.  I got a rush at the end.  Great one, Deb.  Hardrock
catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
2 posted 2000-07-21 07:06 PM


Great analogy Deb. Can we say, "been there". Yes, I guess we are designed to cover the cost. But its not fair. (Once again, you have expressed my feelings perfectly)
Cat..

lotharingia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
3 posted 2000-07-22 03:33 AM


Violently good! (I'm having problems with superlatives today I'm afraid)
I liked this VERY much.
Reminded me of my father.


Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo



kynder
Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537
Tallahassee, Florida
4 posted 2000-07-23 03:48 PM


this is superb!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!  wow all i can say is it a sad thing that so many of us can relate to words such as this.  you express it so very very well.  loved this one.  added it to my library!!

kynder

Sunshine can not bleach
The snow,
Nor time unmake what
Poets know.

Ralph Waldo Emerson

L Tiuch
Member
since 2000-02-04
Posts 151
NY
5 posted 2000-07-23 06:05 PM


Couldn't have said it better myself.  I have been reading in here this afternoon and have been drawn to  the sentiments I so rawly felt at the time I was going through ending my 17 year marriage.   15 years later, I have looked back at some of the writing I did then, and am so aware of the anger that was present.  My worst days now are still beeter that my best days then.  I enjoyed your piece immensely.   Linda
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