navwin » Archives » Dark Poetry #2 » The Smile That You Kept For Me
Dark Poetry #2
Post A Reply Post New Topic The Smile That You Kept For Me Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
demoninlove
Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 211
Dehradun

0 posted 2000-07-21 11:36 AM


The Smile That You Kept For Me

There was once a smile, sweet as honey
Yet it was wild as the sea
A smile that could set bells a ringing
The smile that you kept for me

An enigmatic smile it was at times
At times so lonely
A smile that brought cheer to my life
The smile that you kept for me

It was a smile that caused hearts to flutter
With envy and jealousy
When people saw it was not for them
The smile that you kept for me

A smile that brought out the best in me
Like courage and bravery
A smile that spurred me to greater heights
The smile that you kept for me

But time took its toll and it faded at last
As was never meant to be
And strained is that once beautiful smile
The smile that you keep for me

Deepak Menon




© Copyright 2000 Deepak Menon - All Rights Reserved
Dark_kisses_Within
Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas
1 posted 2000-07-21 11:41 AM


Awwwww so beautiful, yet so sad. I know the feeling too well.  
Great piece!

DkW


Once there was a darkness
Deep and endless night
You gave me everything you had
Ahhhhhh you gave me light


Rex
Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 482
Houston, Texas
2 posted 2000-07-21 12:56 PM


Deepak....sad, but beautiful my friend. I have been there also.

Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility.

-William Wordsworth-

a-alibaster
Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392

3 posted 2000-07-21 01:31 PM


I agree, just beautiful. Do you not wish that you could freeze moments in time.....?

"There is an alter ego which
dwells in every soul..."
a-alibaster

"I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less,
I am tears of pain, tears of Death.

catalinamoon
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
4 posted 2000-07-21 02:04 PM


How melancholy. And beautifully written.
Hardrock
Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
5 posted 2000-07-21 02:31 PM


Yes, Deepak..very beautiful, and sad.  Nice work.  Hardrock
Deborah1
Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
6 posted 2000-07-21 04:11 PM


How we see that "special" something that is just for us, very well written, spoken from the heart!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

glidingdove
Junior Member
since 2000-07-16
Posts 13

7 posted 2000-07-22 09:00 AM


Very Beautiful but who loves keeps his smile intact for all those whom he loves!


chibi_dragon
Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 58

8 posted 2000-07-22 04:10 PM


Wow. This is some good stuff about heartache, demoninlove. But that straining smile chows one thing: that he is in love with another.  
--Chibi

AVANTI
Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE
9 posted 2000-07-23 12:45 PM


sad but true words...
very well written...
great job...well captured

If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao


demoninlove
Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 211
Dehradun
10 posted 2000-07-23 03:40 PM


Thank you all - and yes Rex - I would like some moments frozen in time - and another thing - that smile has never changed and I know it never will....
Deepak


Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Dark Poetry #2 » The Smile That You Kept For Me

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary