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Magebeast
Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 60


0 posted 2000-07-21 04:18 AM


I feel your pain, and try to know it
I feel your pain, and wish to heal it
but to heal, I must get close
beyond the boundaries created
to keep away the other people
I wish that I could share your pain
I wish that you would trust me so
to let me in, and know you well
beyond that mask, long hardened
into your soul, beyond your shell
I wish that you would share my pain
I wish that I could trust you so
I wish the pit inside myself
where my anguish and self derision
where the insults and the teasing go
I wish that you could help me fill
this pit withing me, gaping wide
I wish that you could help me heal
I wish that you could help me know
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I suppose this is a bit different then my others...I hope you guys like it...

© Copyright 2000 Daniel Swan - All Rights Reserved
lotharingia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
1 posted 2000-07-21 05:08 AM


Oh Beast!
(I hope you don't mind me calling you beast!)
Oh Mage!
(is that better?)
This is a sorrowful poem indeed! But sweet too!
Is it about you?
You are invited to share your pain with me!  


Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo



catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
2 posted 2000-07-21 07:55 AM


Yes, I wish all that too Mage, very nice poem, hope things work out like this for you..Its so hard sometimes.


"Keep dreams alive, for if dreams die,
life is a broken winged bird
that cannot fly."

author unknown

Hardrock
Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
3 posted 2000-07-21 10:17 AM


Great theme here.  You can always lay your pain on our doorstep.  And a big doorstep it is too.  Nicely put, Mag.  Hardrock
Verve
Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 348
Singapore
4 posted 2000-07-21 03:23 PM


Hey Mage,

This is certainly laced with desolation and pain ... Great poem.

~verve

Deborah1
Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
5 posted 2000-07-21 03:50 PM


That void is so hard to fill sometimes. Hardrock is right, lay your troubles here, we all care!!! Nicely written

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

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