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DeathTrippy
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since 2000-07-15
Posts 45
WY USA

0 posted 2000-07-21 01:26 AM


Frustration
Motivation
I can't write
I can't cry
My fight tonight

Agrivation
Sensation
I lost it
Can't write it
My mind tonight

No thinking
No breathing
I'm lost
Help me
I don't want to die tonight

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since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764
CA, USA
1 posted 2000-07-21 01:51 AM


I hear your plea my friend. But do not really be thinking about dying. Death will not bring joy to us as your poems have. Great work

Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

taramw
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

2 posted 2000-07-21 02:41 AM


Hmm...  yep, it makes you so angry and everything when you can't write huh?  Hope you're okay.  Take care.
Dark_kisses_Within
Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas
3 posted 2000-07-21 02:48 AM


Awwww have I wished upon death many times.  But hey.... if I were to die .....who would my place here?  Uh huh (nods) no one!!
Nice poem .. I can feel the pain in it.

Peace
DkW


Once there was a darkness
Deep and endless night
You gave me everything you had
Ahhhhhh you gave me light


Magebeast
Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 60

4 posted 2000-07-21 04:13 AM


There is always more to live...a great poem, though.
lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
5 posted 2000-07-21 05:25 AM


Don't worry, you've got us to look after you.  
Great little poem, so full of despair!
I too, hope you're OK, though!


Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo



Lady Lost
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since 2000-07-13
Posts 470

6 posted 2000-07-21 08:27 AM


Many nights I have stared into the face of death, cheating him every time.  I would play the game over and over again, almost enjoying it at times.  I know the feeling all too well, my friend.  I stopped playing that game many years ago..and starting staring into the face of life...what a much easier game to win...

You can never have too much fiction; reality can be such a bore

Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
7 posted 2000-07-21 08:37 AM


To not be able to write...such is a form of death.  When you feel no motivation, no sensations...nothing to write about. I just shift gears, do some mind-cleansing...and usually come up with something totally out of character, and sometimes weird.  Nice expression of your frustration.  Hardrock
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