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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland 
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What good are they when they only seek the ugly marrow of a lifeless lie? I chew my bone behind the monotone shade of grey she slowly bleaches black. A grizzled taste in mouth I'll speak My toxin tongue spits my foul obscenities in all directions. I am a victim to aimless shadows closing in I can not see faces, only sense the walls tightening the noise with out apparent source rises. This torture of my black box, I hate you Creator. Call him merciful, honour his love I deem him whore. I have been the bright little one cleansed and repentant, no naughty things slipped from me, I cherished the beauties then one day I woke…. And I could no longer see. ---------- repost from open 7, response to Isis' challenge about loss of sight. Speaking of which it almost happened to me, I was painting with some chemical did something stupid and some of it splashed on my face just missed my left eye. So I almost lost an eye. why must we pray screaming? why must not death be redefined? we shut our eyes we stretch out our arms and whirl on a pane of glass-patti smith |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Brian...Nice work. I can only imagine the anguish at being blind. I suppose circumstances might determine some of our feelings..but anger would surely predominate. Sorry I missed the challenge. Hardrock |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Brian,...that was frightening. My heart is racing with fear at the thought of that. Incredible work. Be well B. *Peace. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
hallenge well met here Brian. And awful when you nearly lose something, only then do we truly appreciate it, I know from when my eye was bad. Great work here hon  I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Intense poem, Brian. Really vivid. You have some excellent use of language: my toxin tongue I wish I'd have thought of that. Still wish I could hear you reading your stuff! Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Hardrock, yes that is one of the things I would most hate to lose, my sight. Thanks for your wonderful comments. SpitFire, thanks for your comments and concern as always peace. Thanks again. Isis, totally agree. It is only after my accident (see foot note) that I can appreciate the words of my poem. Thanks again for setting the challenge and for your lovely response. lotharingia, I don't know if my some what gentle voice would convey the anger of this poem. Thanks for your wonderful reply. why must we pray screaming? why must not death be redefined? we shut our eyes we stretch out our arms and whirl on a pane of glass-patti smith |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Tempered Anger?? very good btw Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Brian, I have been back to this poem about 6 times, and I can't come up with the right words to express my thoughts on it. Intense is not enough..Awesome? I don't know, but something about the way you put it, and the anger towards God-just knocked me out I guess. Great poem. Cat... |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Jamie, thanks for your kind words. Cat, I thought of how i would feel if I were blind these were my thoughts, and I guess I would be angry at God. Been blind is something I can't even comprehend. Thank you for your wonderful comments. why must we pray screaming? why must not death be redefined? we shut our eyes we stretch out our arms and whirl on a pane of glass-patti smith |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
I love how you put yourself in someone else's shoes! Great poem! I mean it! -Wren The thread of destiny Unknown by anyone Unseen by anyone Winds around your heart Moist with tears -Vampire Princess Miyu Theme |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Great poem Brain. Challenge very well met. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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