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Odysseus tempted
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Odysseus tempted (inspired by Wren's Penelope; thanks Wren  )His voice alive With desire His hands hot With need His eyes wild With fire His mind worn By years Of tears [This message has been edited by lotharingia (edited 07-20-2000).] |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh, very intense in few words. And the title is great! "worn by years of tears". Awesome. "Keep dreams alive, for if dreams die, life is a broken winged bird that cannot fly." author unknown |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
I agree with Cat. Very intense! But very good! Again! |
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Nancee Junior Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 45Australia |
How, you make the sadness of acheing so beautiful... |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Uta...there is such power in this poem...especially when you know that Odysseus was a leader in the Trojan wars, who, after the war, wandered for 10 years before returning home (hence the term "odyssey"). I could visualize him so well here. The title is what clinched it. Hardrock |
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Magebeast Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 60 |
Wow...you really captured the soul of this myth within just a few words. Awesome! |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Very nicely done...short and to the point with loads of emotion. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
You have a gift my friend for portraying emotions briefly but with wonderful imagery. This is fantastic work and you deserve the compliment!! I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Short and wonderful...Agree with hardrocks observations too. jwesley |
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ChibiDeathscythe Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 128 |
Uta....you just....you never cease to amaze me! You create such vivid imagery, I read your work and close my eyes, and see it right before me! Amazing piece! |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
i agree totally with what HardRock said i to have read and know the story of Odysseus and can see him have and i love reading stuff about history and gods and such thanks for posting this. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Ian Llewellyn ap-Griffith Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 197Cincinnati, Oh, U.S.A. |
It almost sounds like you're describing me. Well done! Sing while you may |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
Alot said in such a short verse, again I envy that ability!! Very well done!! The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
I inspired someone! (Boy, do I feel special) Great poem, alot better than mine, I might add! Wonderful! I loved it!Your friend, Wren The thread of destiny Unknown by anyone Unseen by anyone Winds around your heart Moist with tears -Vampire Princess Miyu Theme |
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Click Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 202USA |
Good job with style...it reads good. Thanks!! I like it! Click |
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jennie may* Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 122 |
I love this so much...I am a fan and creator of poems that speak a world of truth in just a few short lines. I can relate to this one...good work "We have all these galaxies inside of us. And if we don't enter those in art, then I don't understand the point in doing anything."-Sam Shepard |
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