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Dark_kisses_Within
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since 2000-03-21
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0 posted 2000-07-20 12:56 PM


I saw you in the distance
The brightness in your stare
I knew at that very instant
That only my heart could bare

You and I were connected
Bonded from the start
Our hearts were as one
That no one could pull part

Yet you seem so far away
So distant to my touch
Feeling the loneliness
Because I miss you so much

The inches seem like miles
The miles seem like years
The seperation between us
Grows wild with my fears

So each night I say a prayer
That God looks down at me
Giving me the courage
For the distance that has to be



Once there was a darkness
Deep and endless night
You gave me everything you had
Ahhhhhh you gave me light


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Jamie
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since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168
Blue Heaven
1 posted 2000-07-20 01:07 AM


Very pretty.
Remember to say one also, for all who are like thee..

Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".


Magebeast
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since 2000-07-19
Posts 60

2 posted 2000-07-20 03:37 AM


Nicely done!  I always admire those who can rhyme.  It's never been my strong point.
catalinamoon
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3 posted 2000-07-20 07:37 AM


"the seperation between us grows wild with my tears" Perfect line, great poem. Talk to God for me too would you?


"Keep dreams alive, for if dreams die,
life is a broken winged bird
that cannot fly."

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Deborah1
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since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
4 posted 2000-07-20 07:40 AM


DKW, I think this is really good, alot of nice verses..I wish we all could get by without those empty spots we feel. Nice work!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
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New Hampshire, USA
5 posted 2000-07-20 09:30 AM


DkW...very good poem.  Wouldn't it be nice to be able to move all these lovers close to one another?  Out of sight is not, necessarily, out of mind.  Hardrock
taramw
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6 posted 2000-07-20 09:33 AM


Oh DKW... nicely put!    Excellent piece!
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7 posted 2000-07-20 12:44 PM


This is a great poem of hope and courage. Thank you for sharing!!!!

Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

Rex
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since 2000-06-29
Posts 482
Houston, Texas
8 posted 2000-07-20 12:49 PM


DKW...very nice!  I know the feeling, and it is tough.  Hang in there!

Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility.

-William Wordsworth-

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