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DeathTrippy
Junior Member
since 2000-07-15
Posts 45
WY USA

0 posted 2000-07-19 11:51 PM


Listing my murders
Naming the dead
Counting my killed
Sick and demented
Watching the eyes
Eyes scream silent
No voice given to fear
I cut out the throat
Jewels that sparkle
As precious as life
Eyes shine sharp
Diamond blade
Engulfed in flames
Blazing to my soul
Breif moment of fire
Life burns in my chest
Where there is no heart
I gain from my dead
Momentary life
Soul-catching my hobby
DeathTrippy

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lotharingia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
1 posted 2000-07-20 04:39 AM


Yuck!
Very graphic!
Don't get me wrong, I think this is really, REALLY good. The image of evil you create here is totally awesome. I hope you're not hiding under my bed!  

Deborah1
Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
2 posted 2000-07-20 07:25 AM


I agree with lotharingia, this is very graphic, but a good job with imagery here. Now and then I have to put that night light on!!! Good Job!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

Hardrock
Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
3 posted 2000-07-20 09:56 AM


DT..this is the stuff movies are made of.  Very intense...especially, "I gain from my dead, momentary life...".  Nice job.  Hardrock
a-alibaster
Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392

4 posted 2000-07-20 12:22 PM


NOw this is ABSOLUTALLY my kind of words!!!! I love it!! Kind of odd to read words that some one else wrote knowing they would come from yourself as well!!!

"There is an alter ego which
dwells in every soul..."
a-alibaster

"I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less,
I am tears of pain, tears of Death.

Xeonox
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since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764
CA, USA
5 posted 2000-07-20 12:47 PM


Buddy you got problems. j/k Actually this is a great twisted little poem .Keep them coming.

Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

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