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SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396


0 posted 2000-07-19 01:28 PM


Pineapple Sands

Pineapple sands in strands of her,
the knowledge soaked and fermented,
while pigeons top the list
and numbers begin consuming all she was.
They wrap her in their times
and place tension between her eyes.
For nights in courts of public recreation,
swindling booths of insanity.
Alarming numbers tug at clothing
only found today.
She fought for safety in yards of fish
and tasted the grim truth before.
She had it for breakfast that day.
She woke to his raging presense
and cried for the spoon to feed.
To be taken with the sugar sweet
and silently slip away,
through blades of him,
to puffs of you,
to soft and
yellow sun.




[This message has been edited by SpitFire (edited 07-19-2000).]

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Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
1 posted 2000-07-19 04:00 PM


SpitFire...What a day-brightener!!  I love this...it's like a free-for-all at the confectioner's store.  If I was a plagarist, I'd steal half a dozen lines for my own use.  Because I'm not, I'll just print it to save for reading again later.  Hardrock
kari
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since 1999-10-03
Posts 104
Hyde Park, Ut, USA
2 posted 2000-07-19 04:32 PM


Very imaginative and splashed with ideas... I like it.
catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
3 posted 2000-07-19 05:05 PM


Another dynamic poem, love it!


"Keep dreams alive, for if dreams die,
life is a broken winged bird
that cannot fly."

author unknown

brian madden
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
4 posted 2000-07-19 06:12 PM


SpitFire, a stunning poem, excellently written.

why must we pray
screaming? why must not death be redefined? we shut our eyes we stretch out our arms and whirl on a pane of glass-patti smith

Deborah1
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since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
5 posted 2000-07-19 06:31 PM


Spitfire, I loved this, but I'll be good too, no stealing lines...very creative, good work!!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

Wren
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since 2000-07-05
Posts 312

6 posted 2000-07-19 07:14 PM


I'm not sure what it was about, but I liked it any way!(It gave the same effect as watching the movie Yellow Submarine at one in the morning) Great poem!
-Wren

The thread of destiny
Unknown by anyone
Unseen by anyone
Winds around your heart
Moist with tears
-Vampire Princess Miyu Theme

Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
7 posted 2000-07-20 02:26 AM


Wonderful kid. I love the lay out.
just drifting in for a min. and pinapple caught my eye.
love ya kid
love and light.
Joel.hhhhhhhoooooooowwwwwwwwwllllllllll

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
8 posted 2000-07-20 04:55 AM


Oh Spitfire,
You truly do spit fires of excellence, never ceasing to amaze me!      
How fantastic this is!
What beautiful words:
To be taken with the sugar sweet
and silently slip away,
through blades of him,
to puffs of you,
to soft and
yellow sun.

By Gum!


PS
Fantastic title!
BTW, How's your cat doing? On the road to recovery I hope!


Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo



Xeonox
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since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764
CA, USA
9 posted 2000-07-20 12:41 PM


This poem was out of the world my friend . Great choice of words and how you twisted them. I enjoyed it.

Ronl

Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

kynder
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since 2000-04-11
Posts 537
Tallahassee, Florida
10 posted 2000-07-21 12:30 PM


i can only reiterate what everyone else has said... this is so full of images.  enjoyed the read!!  excellent work as always.  keep it up.!!

kynder

Sunshine can not bleach
The snow,
Nor time unmake what
Poets know.

Ralph Waldo Emerson

Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
11 posted 2000-07-21 05:43 PM


well what can i say just another great piece from the SpitFire. i hope to read more soon and hope you keep it up my friend. loved the work.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
12 posted 2000-07-21 09:52 PM


SpitFire,

This was excellent writing my friend.  You have grown so much lately in your writing.  So proud of you!!  

Lone Wolf


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

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