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Broken
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since 2000-03-12
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The woods

0 posted 2000-07-18 03:16 PM



BROKEN ANGEL

Broken angel cannot fly
Broken wings made the angel cry
Sitting lonely all day
The little angel will surely die

The room is cold and dark as hell
The angel is not feeling well
Starving to death
The little angel will disappear before anyone can tell

Lonely she should be
Now the little angel starts to pray;
-Why did you leave me?
-Oh father you promised you would stay!

The little angel closes her eye
Now her face is oh so dry
All her pain she kept inside
But now the little angel stops to cry
Six feet in the ground she'll hide
Though her soul will surely fly


© Copyright 2000 Jay Hartson - All Rights Reserved
lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
1 posted 2000-07-18 05:15 PM


*sniff*
The poor little angel!
A beautiful poem!!!


Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo



Dark Enchantress
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since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258
meet Morgana
2 posted 2000-07-18 08:49 PM


That sounds so familiar...*sigh* Very powerful....full of emotion and depth. The last part of it was my favorite...it just really hit me. Lovin' it.   Take care my friend...

                   Yours truly,
                      Angel

By the way...thanks for replying to my poems.  


I wish you could hear
the child that cries
in my flesh and makes
my bones ache
-Jewel

~*Angel of Darkness*~



taramw
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

3 posted 2000-07-19 07:05 AM


Ohhh.... wonderful poem  
Jesse Jaymz
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since 2000-01-24
Posts 708
Youngstown, ohio
4 posted 2000-07-19 07:33 AM


lovely.  truly lovly.  broken angel is my nickname so i had to read this.  i know how this angel feels.  i am an angel whos wings are broken and my never fly again.  see my ex-girlfriend called me her night angel.  then she broke my heart.  now i am a broken angel.  great work my friend.  from one broken angel to another.  *hugs*  we got to stick together.  

Once upon a time there was a light in my life, now theres only love in the dark, There's nothing I can do, a total eclipse of the heart.

Lynne Dale
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since 2000-07-18
Posts 114
Melbourne Victoria
5 posted 2000-07-19 09:32 AM


Kethry comes up and gives you a big hug *hugs*. Wonderful poem.

kethry.
When dark of night takes your soul
Think of me and be made whole.

a-alibaster
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 392

6 posted 2000-07-19 10:09 AM


I can picture a little blond headed sweet faced angel.....but then again, i could be a bit odd.....hehhe
I really enjoyed this.

"There is an alter ego which
dwells in every soul..."
a-alibaster

"I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less,
I am tears of pain, tears of Death.

Magebeast
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since 2000-07-19
Posts 60

7 posted 2000-07-20 12:30 PM


Beautiful...absolutely Beautiful.
Broken
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since 2000-03-12
Posts 271
The woods
8 posted 2000-07-20 07:00 PM


Thank you all for your replies, glad you liked it  

Jesse Jaymz(Broken Angel)~ I'm touched by your kind words, though sad to hear that you know how it feels to be a "Broken Angel". Got to stick together my friend  

D.E~It means a great deal to me that you liked it, thanks for caring  
Your friend ~Broken~

Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
9 posted 2000-07-20 09:29 PM


The broken angel shall again have her wings and happiness, for God does indeed look after the 'special ones'.  She must have faith and hope for a brighter tomorrow.
Great analagies here hon!!  

I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn.....
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)


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