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Poet's Last Rhyme
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Poet's Last Rhyme |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Deeply do I feel this aloneness Bewildered by the cause Questions unasked Liars unmasked I want to speak but I pause Rigid is my conviction That I will leave this place Dead is my soul It’s under control As is the blankness on my face Crowds around me laughing As I stand upon the edge Despair, my friend, Love, at the end Not living up to your pledge Quietly I slip away You even won’t know I’m gone Will you remember that I was here all along? The door closes I cry one last time And thus end’s this poet’s Very last rhyme. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
I would remember! And know my friend, I am always laughing with you, never, never at you!  Sharon, as always, you are able to emit your emotion flawlessly through your words. |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Sharon, at times I have understood well the speaker's seclusion and isolation, alone in a crowd as it were. But for some reason, all I could visualize was a Mime. I think I need more coffee..... Alicat |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
I agree, the emotions shine through here..very well written!! I like this one alot. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Beautifully written as are most all of yours. Perhaps not the intention of the poem, but it speaks to me of self-denial Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
An excellent poem. So sad. *sniff* In the end, in a way, I guess, we are all alone, for who can see within our soul? Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
PdV...such lonliness, such desolation, such anger from betrayal...great imagery here. Loved it. And I hope it's not your last rhyme...you need to be here with us for a long, long time. Hardrock |
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Verve Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 348Singapore |
Dear PdV, This is so painful to read ... Your words really hit home ... Great poem! verve~ |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Gosh, Sharon, everyone beat me to it, on comments. "Deeply do I feel this aloneness, bewildered by the cause" First line grabbed me and held on. Hope you are not as sad as this sounds. You are a phenomenal writer. You can't stop! "If a man moves you to feel like a woman, the least you can do is let him." Merrit Malloy |
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LarBear Member
since 2000-06-23
Posts 138Kingston, New York |
PdV, What a powerfull array of emotions gave to this one. Excellent The First part was the part that touched me most. LarBear |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Sharon, this is very sad, my friend, but written with excellence! Nice to read you again dear.  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Rigid is my conviction [to write] That I will leave this place [for peace] Dead is my soul [to the laughter] It’s under control [of my mind] As is the blankness on my face [but I shall smile again] Ah PdV, what thoughts you give me! Well done... Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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demoninlove Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 211Dehradun |
The Poet De Vine is really divine But I hope a liar will prove to be For within does ever brightly shine A Spark that will glow as another rhyme! Deepak |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I would miss you Sharon. . . you know the rest. . . --------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Portia Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 157 |
This strikes home for me. What is it about poets and isolation? Are we writers because we're isolated? Or are we isolated because we're writers? You've captured such a universal truth here; thank you. www.fvpf.org |
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Lynne Dale Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 114Melbourne Victoria |
I hope this is just words and not real. How could we survive without your imagery? kethry. When dark of night takes your soul Think of me and be made whole. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is so beautiful, I read it aloud. How often do we touch someone's life, give totally and wonder what happens when they leave and the door closes. Oh, how this touches me, it brings tears to my eyes because it is so true. They take part of us with them and carry it forever. It hurts doesn't it? God bless you for writing such a lovely poem. Kathleen |
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Magebeast Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 60 |
It bring's a tear to one's eye. I feel this poem in a personal way... |
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