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Hardrock
Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA

0 posted 2000-07-17 09:51 PM


The Boarding House

I should build a boarding house,
For all who’ve hurt and pained.
A place to lock ourselves away,
And have our hearts retrained.

A place of sun and flowers fresh,
A place of joy and song.
A place to give our souls a rest,
To help our hearts be strong.

Love takes its toll on those of us
Whose spirit’s seen hard times.
We need a place to find some peace,
And put our heart to rhymes.

We need this place to get away,
And breathe a different air.
To rest a spell and shed a tear,
And find some comfort there.

I’ll hire Isis as my architect,
And see just what she fashions.
And when it’s done, I’ll move right in,
And call the place Dark Passions.

What’s that you say, it’s been done?
There’s nothing left to do?
Well, no need to build another one,
So I’ll stay here with you.

So if your heart is tired and sore,
Your life is filled with gloom.
Come join me in Dark Passions,
Where you’ll always find a room.




[This message has been edited by Hardrock (edited 07-19-2000).]

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SpitFire
Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

1 posted 2000-07-17 10:09 PM


~YOU are AWESOME!!!  Def, def, definately book material. Mmhhmm, Indeed. This takes the cake. Be well you. *Peace.
Deborah1
Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
2 posted 2000-07-17 10:09 PM


I am packing as I speak!!! You have portrayed a place that I wished existed..but it does now here at passions, thanks to you!!! Wonderful work, thank you!!!! I think I will make you the guest of honor.....

[This message has been edited by Deborah1 (edited 07-17-2000).]

Deborah1
Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
3 posted 2000-07-17 10:13 PM


Oops didn't finish my sentence...You are the guest of honor here at Dark Passions, and a place I will proudly share with you!!!
Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley
4 posted 2000-07-17 10:21 PM


If this doesn't make it into the book, keep it bookmarked..this is definitely a keeper. Excellent rhyme/meter!!!! I love it.  
Dark_kisses_Within
Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas
5 posted 2000-07-17 11:51 PM


Alrighty then !!!!!!  Excellent poem Hardrock!  It sounds so pieceful and lovely.  I'll reserve a seat for awhile.   
Thanks
DkW


Once there was a darkness
Deep and endless night
You gave me everything you had
Ahhhhhh you gave me light


lotharingia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
6 posted 2000-07-18 09:28 AM


What can I say? What a homage!
Astoundingly good!  


Lotharingia
"For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?"
Tom Holland


Jamie
Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168
Blue Heaven
7 posted 2000-07-18 12:54 PM


Great Allusions Batman!!!!
Anyone remember the old TV show "Dark Shadows"?...
I liked it Hardrock!

Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".


catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
8 posted 2000-07-18 01:01 PM


On my way, suitcase packed...Oh, too bad its not a real physical place to go..but the emotional solace here has been so wonderful.  LOVE LOVE LOVE this poem. You are always awesome, you write my thoughts so many times.
Thanks
Luv ya
Sandra



"If a man moves you to feel like a woman,
the least you can do is let him."
Merrit Malloy

Rex
Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 482
Houston, Texas
9 posted 2000-07-18 03:04 PM


Beautiful Marv, awesome!  Enjoyed it very much.  

Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility.

-William Wordsworth-

Wren
Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312

10 posted 2000-07-18 05:49 PM


How wonderful! I really love this place! Everybody is so nice and supportive.....This poem describes everything so well! Great job!  
-Wren

The thread of destiny
Unknown by anyone
Unseen by anyone
Winds around your heart
Moist with tears
-Vampire Princess Miyu Theme

LarBear
Member
since 2000-06-23
Posts 138
Kingston, New York
11 posted 2000-07-18 07:23 PM


Well there you go hardrock!
The them poem for our little room to let our feelings run and share.

Good work. I loved it.

BTW, you were in the Army or still are?
Hey I made it the Member stage... < jumping around> Yeppie...... Yahoo..... I guess I get a free pass to the place we call passions..

LarBear

[This message has been edited by LarBear (edited 07-18-2000).]

demoninlove
Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 211
Dehradun
12 posted 2000-07-19 10:58 AM


You have quite easily outdone yourself with this one! Excellent build up to a lovely ending!
Deepak


Magebeast
Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 60

13 posted 2000-07-20 12:07 PM


"I should build a boarding house,
For all who’ve hurt and pained.
A place to lock ourselves away,
And have our hearts retrained"

This really hit somthing...powerful words...well done

Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
14 posted 2000-07-21 04:58 PM


well my friend this is really great i really enjoyed it and how you expressed this place. you express this place and what it doe's for each of us so well do keep it up my friend. i voted for you and this lovely place.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
15 posted 2000-07-21 05:05 PM


Hardrock,

Great piece!!!  Loved it!!  If only there were such a place to go.  Wonderful writing!!


LW


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

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