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qtpieelmo
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since 2000-07-04
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Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY

0 posted 2000-07-15 09:57 AM


HOLLOW

Can you see into my soul?
Can you read into my eyes?
Can you see under my skin,
& see who I really am?
All of this is hopeless.
Life's no longer worth living.
It's the point where everyday is cloudy,
& pain is all I feel.
Where death would be a welcum guest.
Emptiness surrounds me.
Is sleep as bad as waking?
Haunting visions in my subconscious.
My only relief is to give myself,
to the eternal darkness.
Help me find someone who really cares.
Help me find peace without death.
Lead me to the light,
& put a smile on my face.

~In our attempt to cope with early situations, we chose a passive position.~
LOVE ELMO


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catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
1 posted 2000-07-15 04:27 PM


Elmo, I hope you are happier now. This is very touching, and sad, and expressive of that hopeless feeling we can all struggle with.

DeathTrippy
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since 2000-07-15
Posts 45
WY USA
2 posted 2000-07-15 04:39 PM


Very hopeless feeling conveyed here.  I like the ending although to me it makes it even more helpless.  If nobody cares who will help you find somebody who does care?  That is just my view though, and I'm glad your feeling happier at the end than at the beginning of this.
qtpieelmo
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since 2000-07-04
Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY
3 posted 2000-07-16 04:22 PM


Awww thanx i did find some1 actually who gets me through the tougher dayz   LOVE ELMO
Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
4 posted 2000-07-17 08:41 AM


"Help me find peace without death"...this line speaks to me...and many others I'm sure.  Good stuff, Elmo.  Hardrock
qtpieelmo
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since 2000-07-04
Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY
5 posted 2000-07-17 05:30 PM


Thanx All!!! "Inside I'm hurting, even though my eyes are dry. If you let a tear roll down your cheek, don't mean you're weak, just means you're strong enough to cry"   LOVE ELMO
Deborah1
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since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
6 posted 2000-07-17 06:49 PM


Oh Elmo, don't ever give up, there is always someone who cares..we care her at DP, don't forget that!!! Hope your doing ok, a very moving poem!!!
SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

7 posted 2000-07-17 08:12 PM


~After reading this poem I am glad to learn that you have found someone to help you through. Sad yet well written expression. Be well E. *Peace.
qtpieelmo
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since 2000-07-04
Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY
8 posted 2000-07-18 08:39 AM


Yes I really do feel welcomed here & i plan to stay for a very long time thanx every1   Yes if it weren't for my boyfriend i probably wouldn't be here today he showed me everything that i have going for me & he showed me millions of reasons to stay   LOVE ELMO
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