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a_little_girl
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since 2000-05-08
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San Alejandro, HI, USA

0 posted 2000-07-13 10:08 PM


*Yawn* Aww man another one? Okay...

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When you are gone,
the soul in me trembles,
oh so slightly.
Without your voice in the phone,
talking to me nightly.
When you are gone,
my battle with darkness is lost.
Threatening to take over.
My body.
When you are gone,
darkness creeps into me.
Something that the ordinary world,
doesn't see.
Where are you?

--the little one

© Copyright 2000 Karen McLeod - All Rights Reserved
Wren
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since 2000-07-05
Posts 312

1 posted 2000-07-13 10:26 PM


Poor little one. I understand exactaly how you feel. Great poem!
-Wren

The thread of destiny
Unknown by anyone
Unseen by anyone
Winds around your heart
Moist with tears
-Vampire Princess Miyu Theme

Little_Spyro
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since 2000-01-09
Posts 659
San Diego, CA, USA
2 posted 2000-07-13 11:48 PM


Aww...

This is kind of a sad poem...is there anything I can do to cheer you up? If so, just ask me...

Little Spyro T. Dragon

kaile
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3 posted 2000-07-14 12:45 PM


very well put, i esp like the part about "darkness creeping into me but the ordinary world doesn't see"...
i only hope this is just a poem and not personal feel free to e-mail me if this is what you are feeling now


Dark_kisses_Within
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since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas
4 posted 2000-07-14 01:38 AM


Awwwwwwww such a sad poem!  
But let me give ya some advise that a dear friend off the internet gave me........ Never give 100% to one person and one person only.  Because if/when that person leaves your world will seem to fall apart.  Spread a little bit of love around.  
(I hope I said all that correctly  )

Great poem BTW!
Peace DkW


Once there was a darkness
Deep and endless night
You gave me everything you had
Ahhhhhh you gave me light


sgreybe
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since 2000-04-28
Posts 209
London, UK
5 posted 2000-07-14 02:28 PM


Dear little one

A precious, painful poem, written with such elegance and emotional flair.  I can and do so relate to this one.

Chin up, friend.

Sylvia

qtpieelmo
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since 2000-07-04
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6 posted 2000-07-14 08:49 PM


AWWWW great poem & I know excactly how u feel I have been in a long distance relationship for 1 year & 2 months now (we live 5 hours away from each other) & its sooo very hard anyway enough about my life good job!! LOVE ELMO  
Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
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Angels Camp
7 posted 2000-07-15 02:03 AM


Yes kid when they are gone it seems as though the darkness has a running start on your soul, and no one can see this.
But you have a small light within this darkness and that's your poetry, it will shine bright enough to see your way in a storm.

Love, light.
Joel.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
8 posted 2000-07-16 06:37 PM


Little One..."Without your voice in the phone, talking to me nightly"...so many relationships are built on you, him/her and ma bell.  Sad poem...but so true.  Hardrock
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San Diego, Ca.
9 posted 2000-07-16 08:44 PM


Nice poem, very sad.  I've felt like that at times when I'm away from home.
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10 posted 2000-07-16 08:44 PM


Nice poem, very sad.  I've felt like that at times when I'm away from home.
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