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Nancee
Junior Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 45
Australia

0 posted 2000-07-12 02:24 PM


Colouring the rising sun
The skies above a bath,
Reflecting from the hedges
the definition of your part,
Tinting the mortar of each stone
those before and aft,
Embellishing the wares
of your chosen craft,
Darkness is cast.

Shades ever changing
Every step you make,
Saturate the hollows
each breath you take,
The stairs your queue
Climb the hues.
Final destination
Within or without,
Darkness is cast.



© Copyright 2000 SHADE - All Rights Reserved
SpitFire
Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

1 posted 2000-07-12 08:27 PM


~This sort of blanketed me in a smothering sort of way...as if it were inevitable...and made me feel like,...ok like it or not,...the darkness is cast. Wow. Affecting poem here. Powerful. Take care. *Peace.
kynder
Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537
Tallahassee, Florida
2 posted 2000-07-12 09:56 PM


wow nancee... this is so descriptive and elusive all at the same time.  excellent work here.  you make darkness seem like an unerasable dye.... for it has been cast.  loved this!!!

kynder

Across the gateway of my heart,
I wrote "No Thoroughfare!!"
But love came laughing by and
Cried "I enter everywhere!!!"

Herbert Shipman

demoninlove
Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 211
Dehradun
3 posted 2000-07-12 10:36 PM


To a Discerning and Penetrative Poet
Very Well Written
Deepak


Hardrock
Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
4 posted 2000-07-13 12:57 PM


I believe SpitFire said it for me too.  Awesome.  Hardrock
moshpit
Member
since 1999-11-25
Posts 143
cebu, philippines
5 posted 2000-07-13 08:18 AM


this poem reminds me of a Police song.. but the words here are more beautiful.. touching, Nancee.
catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
6 posted 2000-07-13 11:20 AM


Nancee, I concur with the others. Very good work. It does feel inevitable sometimes, I know..
Take care
Catalinamoon



"If a man moves you to feel like a woman,
the least you can do is let him."
Merrit Malloy

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