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Nancee
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since 2000-06-17
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Australia

0 posted 2000-07-12 01:19 PM


-Aural capacity difinitive
-Olfactory heightened
-Vision dilated and glazed
-Airways heavy and choked
-B/P 200 over 60
-Fevered and shivering
-Fluid intake maximum
-Neural activity erratic...
PROGNOSIS
-definitely toxic waste.



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Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
1 posted 2000-07-12 03:47 PM


Nancee....coming from a medical background, I understood this perfectly.  I liked how you used the Prognosis, instead of Diagnosis..yes, we will all become toxic waste someday.  (For further reference, see the movie "Soylent Green")  Hardrock
Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
2 posted 2000-07-12 04:01 PM


Great!

And a suggestion: Better yet, read "Make Room, Make Room" by Harry Harrison...It's the book Soylent Green was based on and delves much deeper into the idea!  

brian madden
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
3 posted 2000-07-12 04:36 PM


Nancee, I was terrible at science but I can get my head around this. A very interesting piece, really enjoyed it.

"I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else" faster-Manic street preachers.

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