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Walter Poe
Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787


0 posted 2000-07-12 08:53 AM



I would love to grow old looking at you
Your heart speaks out to me
Yet i am beyond redemption beyond hope
All is death all gone in smoke
How i hoped how my dreams are crushed
in the moring as light returns
Hold me always be my spark
In the night I look out to you
In my way I love you always
But as you begin so do i end
walk with me awhile hold my hand
just avert your gaze as i walk away
over a cliff you have my tears
Could you find a place
In the last hope you gave
To return to a grave unmarked

Why now you come to me
In my darkest night
I am defeated
My last is done
The monster inside has won
Its eaten the good
Now like rotten wood
I alone will die
Don't be with me now
Let me leave in peace
The darkness is so appealing



Oh Danny boy, the pipes, the pipes are calling
From glen to glen, and down the mountain side
The summer's gone, and all the roses falling
'Tis

© Copyright 2000 Paul Weatherstone - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-07-12 10:07 AM


I would love to grow old looking at you
Your heart speaks out to me
Yet i am beyond redemption beyond hope
All is death all gone in smoke
How i hoped how my dreams are crushed
in the moring as light returns
Hold me always be my spark
In the night I look out to you
In my way I love you always
But as you begin so do i end
walk with me awhile hold my hand
just avert your gaze as i walk away
over a cliff you have my tears
Could you find a place
In the last hope you gave
To return to a grave unmarked
----------------

walter this is so sad ...
you write with so much emotion and heart...
how can you say you have no hope ...
your poetry has so much soul in it...
I know you take your comfort
in the dark...
but please dont become lost in it...
let your poetry be your light...
your heart and hope always shine in your words...
take care, please
jm

I think I could need - this in my life
If you're gone - baby you need to come home
there's a little bit of something me
In everything in you
MB20

Deborah1
Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
2 posted 2000-07-12 10:30 AM


Janet speaks such truth here, please hold onto the light, keep the faith and hope, your poetry is filled with emotions, very well written, I hope to read more, Im wishing happiness for you!!
Traveller
New Member
since 2000-07-12
Posts 6

3 posted 2000-07-12 11:59 AM


Dark world of which we are a part. We head toward the darkness because it is a refuge, it appeals to us. Does not man love darkness rather than light? For in that darkness our fears are hidden, our past is unseen. Fear it not, it is a haven for the lost soul.

Traveller

Nancee
Junior Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 45
Australia
4 posted 2000-07-12 01:32 PM


Well Walter...I feel it is brilliant.
Enough is enough. But more of your work, please.

I would like to agree with Travellers comment(Welcome) and urge a post.

Jesse Jaymz
Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708
Youngstown, ohio
5 posted 2000-07-12 02:31 PM


the darkness has swallowed many a soul including my own.  so in this you are not alone my friend.  true all of our storys are differant but one common thing, heart ache.  and sometimes that will never go away.  but overtime it might lessen.  and remember you always got friends here who care about you.  great work  
Jesse Jaymz
Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708
Youngstown, ohio
6 posted 2000-07-12 02:32 PM


the darkness has swallowed many a soul including my own.  so in this you are not alone my friend.  true all of our storys are differant but one common thing, heart ache.  and sometimes that will never go away.  but overtime it might lessen.  and remember you always got friends here who care about you.  great work  

Once upon a time I was falling in love but now I'm only falling apart, There's nothing I can do, a total eclipse of the heart.
Once upon a time th

Hardrock
Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
7 posted 2000-07-13 12:12 PM


Quite good, Walter.  More please.  Hardrock
LarBear
Member
since 2000-06-23
Posts 138
Kingston, New York
8 posted 2000-07-14 01:39 PM


Walter,

I like this type of poem. Moving into the feelings and emotions of love.

Great writing.

LarBear

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