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lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
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saarbruecken, Germany

0 posted 2000-07-12 04:27 AM


Toxic
Thanks to allan for the idea  

If love is a virus
Infect me now
Let me inhale
Your breath, your air
Give me this disease
Forever to share

If love is a virus
Poison me now
Let me savour
Your blood, your lips
Give me this torment
Forever to kiss



Lotharingia
"For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?"
Tom Holland


© Copyright 2000 uta waller - All Rights Reserved
taramw
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Posts 738

1 posted 2000-07-12 04:34 AM


Hmm... a good way of putting it!    I really like the phrase "If love is a virus"!!  I thought it was!    "Let me inhale your breath"... well put!!  I reckon this is one of your best ones Uta!  
Deborah1
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since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
2 posted 2000-07-12 07:29 AM


Reminds me of the old cliche..bitten by the  love bug..I loved it, great idea and love sure can feel like a virus!!! Good work!!!

Nostalgia is like a grammar lesson...You find the present tense..and the past perfect
"Anonymous"


catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
3 posted 2000-07-12 07:35 AM


Oh I like this one a lot. make that A LOT! I think this calls to be priinted, sent to my long distance guy, something...
And I absolutely think love is a virus, takes you over, knocks you out, and goes away as suddenly as it came..
Sandra



"If a man moves you to feel like a woman,
the least you can do is let him."
Merrit Malloy

Wren
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since 2000-07-05
Posts 312

4 posted 2000-07-12 12:01 PM


I'm dissapointed to find that this isen't a book submission! Darn! I would have voted for it in an instent! This poem is great, and you have confirmed what I thought as true for a long time- Love IS a virus!
-Wren

The thread of destiny
Unknown by anyone
Unseen by anyone
Winds around your heart
Moist with tears
-Vampire Princess Miyu Theme

allan
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since 2000-04-09
Posts 620
On the road
5 posted 2000-07-12 12:30 PM


Excellent work Uta! A nice feel of depth to this poem. (It really gets under the skin...)

Allan





[This message has been edited by allan (edited 07-12-2000).]
Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
6 posted 2000-07-12 03:48 PM


I'd like to second the post!   Sounds good to me!
brian madden
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ireland
7 posted 2000-07-12 04:39 PM


lotharingia, really enjoyed this piece some wonderful images.

"I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else" faster-Manic street preachers.

kynder
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since 2000-04-11
Posts 537
Tallahassee, Florida
8 posted 2000-07-12 10:24 PM


yes oh yes lothie.  may i be completely infected by this virus.  and may no antidote or antibotic be created to cure me.  excellent work here!!!!! loved it!!

kynder

Across the gateway of my heart,
I wrote "No Thoroughfare!!"
But love came laughing by and
Cried "I enter everywhere!!!"

Herbert Shipman

Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
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New Hampshire, USA
9 posted 2000-07-13 12:46 PM


Uta...excellent.  Clever.  Total enjoyment.  Hardrock
insect
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10 posted 2000-07-13 12:57 PM


Fantastic!
Love this.

kaile
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singapore
11 posted 2000-07-14 12:31 PM


what an unique way to describe Love..like the originality here
lotharingia
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Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
12 posted 2000-07-14 10:41 AM


Thanks everyone !!!
Especially Allan    


Lotharingia
"For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?"
Tom Holland


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