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lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany

0 posted 2000-07-10 05:07 AM


I am a duplicate
Alive alone
To look at you
When you go
I disintegrate
Nothing but
A duplicate


Lotharingia
"For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?"
Tom Holland


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taramw
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

1 posted 2000-07-10 08:13 AM


Wow! Another great one!  

I disintegrate
Nothing but
A duplicate

This puts an image right before your eyes!  Excellenté !!  

Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
2 posted 2000-07-10 08:24 AM


Uta...some of your best work is in these little "snippets" of imagery you create.  I admire your work so much.  Hardrock
ChibiDeathscythe
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since 2000-06-09
Posts 128

3 posted 2000-07-10 09:42 AM


Very vivid picture this creates....you say so much in these little pieces.
Wren
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since 2000-07-05
Posts 312

4 posted 2000-07-10 10:49 AM


"Alive alone
To look at you"
Very beautiful......great concept! Love this poem!  

catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
5 posted 2000-07-10 11:19 AM


OH, I could feel the pain there. Beautiful..
Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
6 posted 2000-07-10 10:30 PM


yes are we only what we create? who knows. this is another great piece from you and i hope to see more real soon keep it up.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


Portia
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since 2000-05-18
Posts 157

7 posted 2000-07-12 01:10 AM


So wistful... rather like I feel now. I would love to know whether the other in the pair feels the same, and perhaps they haven't talked about it? But that is for the speaker's partner to know. So much left hanging, and it only adds to the weight of the poem.
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