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Broken
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since 2000-03-12
Posts 271
The woods

0 posted 2000-07-09 09:36 PM




Deep...
Deep down inside
It's so black and cold
Alone as alone can be
I try to run, try to hide
Far away, deep inside

Hurt myself, tore a hole
Bleeding body, losing my soul
Can't really function, so full of fear
What have I become
A beast to many, an angel to some

Built another wall, another hidaway
A different place, some other day
I'll do the same
Try to make it go away, kill the pain

So very tired, need some rest
I'll sink, further and further down
'Til this world is nothing but a bad dream
Wherever it is, it's better than this
Yeah I think I'll go tell myself I'm going down
Deep, deep, deep down inside

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Base not your joy upon the deeds of others, for what is given can be taken away. No hope=no fear


© Copyright 2000 Jay Hartson - All Rights Reserved
StarrGazer
Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679
Texas
1 posted 2000-07-09 11:29 PM


wow  this  was great  feel as  if i was  reading about myself ...but I'm finding  burying  myself inside sometimes can lead  to more pain ... Nicely  written
Hardrock
Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
2 posted 2000-07-10 08:44 AM


Broken...deep inside is a nice place to visit, but you wouldn't want to live there.  Nice poem.  Very moving.  Hardrock
catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
3 posted 2000-07-10 09:33 AM


Very sad, and well written. Cheer up, there is always a light somewhere in the black hole, its just hard to find somtime. Keep looking.
Sandra

lotharingia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
4 posted 2000-07-10 11:27 AM


This is an excellent poem. Though I am inclined to disagree No hope=fear, for me at any rate. I hope you're OK!!!

Lotharingia
"For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?"
Tom Holland


Deborah1
Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
5 posted 2000-07-11 07:37 PM


Alot of pain here, but not someplace I want you to stay. Sometimes when we reach the bottom the only place to go is up, and I want you to find the top again, my best to you, a very good poem, but sad
Dark Enchantress
Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258
meet Morgana
6 posted 2000-07-11 08:08 PM


I've missed you my dear friend...I was also curious as to how you were doing. Once again...your words are an echo of the silent song my spirit sings and as usual you've done an excellent job. Unfortunately you can't run or hide from who you are...believe me I've tried just as I know you have...but I hope you can find some form of peace within yourself. We need a balance between the worlds that collide within our souls. But you're not as alone as you think you are...I'm never too far away.  

                                Yours Truly,
                                    Angel


I wish you could hear
the child that cries
in my flesh and makes
my bones ache
-Jewel

~*Angel of Darkness*~



Jamie
Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168
Blue Heaven
7 posted 2000-07-11 10:23 PM


Your words echo from the depths of despair.
Great poetry.

Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".


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